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Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world? v.2

Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world? v. 2
The nature is a beautiful gift from God to the mankind. However, its importance is often lost on human beings. There are various reasons for this behavior which include general ignorance and lack of laws protecting the nature. This can be overcome if proper knowledge is disseminated and laws protecting the nature are passed. The foremost reason for the declining importance of nature in people’s eyes is ignorance. There are a number of people who do not know the repercussions of plucking a flower from a plant or cutting a tree for the purpose of development. Furthermore, the laws protecting nature are insufficient in various parts of the world. The people associated with different industries affecting natural world do not realize their misdemeanor. The amount dramatically decreased. To explain, a woodman would not know that cutting a tree is harmful unless he is prosecuted for it while setting an example for the others. There are a number of steps that can be taken to instill the importance of flora and fauna in people. Firstly, the governments can come up with various programs that raise awareness among people. The paid documentaries from the wildlife departments of many countries have proven to be fruitful in invigorating a sense of love for the nature in people. Secondly, the governments should introduce laws that ensure the balance of the nature. When someone is prosecuted for interfering with nature, others learn the idea behind it which is keeping the balance of the nature. For example, when someone is prosecuted for killing a giraffe, other poachers get a message to not interfere with the nature. In conclusion, the significance of natural world is declining in the eyes of the people. The time is ripe for the governments to plan and legislate to raise awareness about the natural habitat.
The
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nature
is a
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beautiful
gift from God to the mankind.
However
, its importance is
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often
lost on human beings. There are various reasons for this behavior which include general ignorance and lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
. This can
be overcome
if proper knowledge
is disseminated
and
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laws
protecting the
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nature
are passed
.

The foremost reason for the declining importance of
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nature
in
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people’s
eyes is ignorance. There are a number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who do not know the repercussions of plucking a flower from a plant or cutting a tree for the purpose of development.
Furthermore
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
protecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
are insufficient in various parts of the world. The
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people
associated with
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different
industries affecting natural world do not realize their misdemeanor. The amount
dramatically
decreased. To
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explain
, a woodman would not know that cutting a tree is harmful unless he
is prosecuted
for it while setting an example for the others.

There are a number of steps that can
be taken
to instill the importance of flora and fauna in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
Firstly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with various programs that raise awareness among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. The paid documentaries from the wildlife departments of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries have proven to be fruitful in invigorating a sense of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should introduce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
that ensure the balance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
. When someone
is prosecuted
for interfering with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
, others learn the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
behind it which is keeping the balance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
.
For example
, when someone
is prosecuted
for killing a giraffe, other poachers
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get
a message to not interfere with the nature.

In conclusion
, the significance of natural world is declining in the eyes of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. The time is ripe for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
to plan and legislate to raise awareness about the natural habitat.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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