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Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 1
Advertisement is a feature, usually used by companies for launching and promoting a product or a service. A popular belief is that advertising plays an indispensable role in increasing the sales rate of common goods. I believ that the aforesaid statement is true and thid essay will discuss the effects of advertising goods and services on people's minds and provide relevant evidences for it. Advertisements come in various forms such as posters, short films, door to door promotion and many more. In other words, the role of advertising in our society is to change people's opinions and to sell products to consumers. Advertisements explain the usage and utility of various products which target to enhance the number of customers. Moreover, companies try to make these advertisements more alluring with added promotional offers. The more often people notice an advertisemen, either by seeing it or hearing about it, the stronger the correlation of the product becomes for the brain. This affects the buying decision for people. For example, I read an article in the newspaper that 90 percent of folks are making choices for their daily need based on the repetition and the attractiveness of the advertisements. This is true as some advertisements have influenced me to buy more and more goods impulsively. Furthermore, various advertisements target specific age group people. The promotions that are aimed at youngsters are made tempting and captivating. These advertisements use persuasive language to influence the target customers by making them feel the need to experience the product. If an ideal solution or goal is potrayed, then it is bound to catch the eye and retain in the mind for a long time. For example, I have seen my brother buying chocolates from a shop by describing the advertisement that he wathes everyday. Thus, people are no longer pondering on the fact that whether they need the products or want them to satisfy their craves. Drawing on the lines of conclusion, advertisements have become the easiest way to reach people in order to sell goods and services. Repetition of advertisements either in visual or audio forms trick people's mind which yearn for products that people might not need to sustain life. Thus, I believe that continuous advertisements are directly proportional to the enhanced rate of sales.
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usually
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used
by
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companies
for launching and promoting a
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product
or a service. A popular belief is that advertising plays an indispensable role in increasing the sales rate of common
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goods
. I
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believ
that the aforesaid statement is true and
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thid
essay will discuss the effects of advertising
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goods
and services on
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people
's minds and provide relevant evidences for it.

Advertisements
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in various forms such as posters, short films, door to door promotion and
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more.
In other words
, the role of advertising in our society is to
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change
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people
's opinions and to sell
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products
to consumers.
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Advertisements
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explain
the usage and utility of various
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products
which target to enhance the number of customers.
Moreover
,
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companies
try to
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make
these
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advertisements
more alluring with
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added
promotional offers. The more
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often
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people
notice an
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advertisemen
, either by seeing it or hearing about it, the stronger the correlation of the
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product
becomes for the brain. This affects the buying decision for
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people
.
For example
, I read an article in the newspaper that 90 percent of folks are making choices for their daily
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need
based on the repetition and the attractiveness of the
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advertisements
. This is true as
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some
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advertisements
have influenced me to
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buy
more and more
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goods
impulsively
.

Furthermore
, various
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advertisements
target specific age group
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people
. The promotions that
are aimed
at youngsters
are made
tempting and captivating. These
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advertisements
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use
persuasive language to influence the target customers by making them feel the
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need
to experience the
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product
. If an ideal solution or goal is
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potrayed
, then it
is bound
to catch the eye and retain in the mind for a long time.
For example
, I have
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seen
my brother buying chocolates from a shop by describing the
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advertisement
that he
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wathes
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everyday
.
Thus
,
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people
are no longer pondering on the fact that whether they
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need
the
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products
or want them to satisfy their craves.

Drawing on the lines of conclusion,
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advertisements
have become the easiest way to reach
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people
in order to sell
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goods
and services. Repetition of
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advertisements
either in visual or audio forms trick
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people
's mind which yearn for
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products
that
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people
might not
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need
to sustain life.
Thus
, I believe that continuous
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advertisements
are
directly
proportional to the enhanced rate of sales.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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