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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2
Never before have we experienced the substantial contributions of the Internet to our modern lives. In fact, since its emergence, human lives have been claimed to be much improved, particularly in both social and educational aspects. With a view to highlighting its significance in these two fields, some notable benefits are to be put under critical discussion. First and foremost, social activities could not be smoothly sustained without the Internet’s support. Just imagine that the distribution of the world knowledge would be restrained and human would live in an isolated and confining world of their own with very little interaction among nations and territories. Therefore, the Internet is widely acknowledged to actively foster social communication, keeping the globe revolving and boundaries of information dispersing. As such, our social life is bound to be enriching and exhilarating. In addition, the Internet performs a pivotal role in the academic life. A plethora of applications from electronic gadgets with a wireless broadband connection brought into being in classrooms pledge to facilitate learning and teaching activities. In other words, teachers can incorporate websites and podcasts into class to arouse students’ interest and maximize their learning outcomes. Such activities make valuable contributions to the academic life, creating a more favourable and convenient environment for students’ life. There is no denying that the Internet offers our social and academic life numerous advantages. With a strong hold of the world information and technological applications, we are likely to indulge in such a comfortable and easily accessible digital world.
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have we experienced the substantial contributions of the Internet to our modern
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lives
. In fact, since its emergence, human
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lives
have
been claimed
to be much
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improved
,
particularly
in both
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social
and educational aspects. With a view to highlighting its significance in these two fields,
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some
notable benefits are to
be put
under critical discussion.

First
and foremost,
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social
activities could not be
smoothly
sustained without the Internet’s support.
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Just
imagine that the distribution of the
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world
knowledge would
be restrained
and human would
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live
in an isolated and confining
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world
of their
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own
with
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very
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little
interaction among nations and territories.
Therefore
, the Internet is
widely
acknowledged to
actively
foster
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social
communication, keeping the globe revolving and boundaries of information dispersing. As such, our
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social
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life
is bound
to be enriching and exhilarating.

In addition
, the Internet performs a pivotal role in the academic
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life
. A plethora of applications from electronic gadgets with a wireless broadband connection brought into being in classrooms pledge to facilitate learning and teaching activities.
In other words
, teachers can incorporate websites and podcasts into
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class
to arouse students’ interest and maximize their learning outcomes. Such activities
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make
valuable contributions to the academic
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life
, creating a more
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favourable
and convenient environment for students’ life.

There is no denying that the Internet offers our
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social
and academic
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life
numerous advantages. With a strong hold of the
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world
information and technological applications, we are likely to indulge in such a comfortable and
easily
accessible digital
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world
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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