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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v.6

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 6
It is argued that the most effective solution to reduce the ever-increasing environmental hazards around the word is fuel cost. I completely disagree with this idea, and this essay will argue some other method to decrease in environmental threat. Firstly, transports are an essential in the ever-increasing environmental pollution threat throughout the world; therefore, people are encouraged to use other alternative means of transport save money. The use of petroleum and gasoline can emit toxic chemicals into environmental air, and it is destroying our lives. Increasing the price of fuel is not good the best way because this solution would happen several social disagreements and resentment. For instance, raising fuel cost affect in the financial families. Furthermore, even if the price were increased, people would still travel on a daily basics. Secondly, one of the other ways to prevent the ever-increasing environmental threat is that the government should impose strict regulations of restricting the use of private vehicles. In addition, people are urged to use public transportation because this leads to relieve the heavy traffic and we can protect better the environment. For example, going cycling contribute to improve the environment, and it is environmentally friendly. Moreover, the responsibility to protect the environment should fall upon the government and individuals; thus, everyone needs to increase awareness among solving environmental hazards. In conclusion, the price of fuel is not the best way to prevent the ever-increasing environmental hazards. There is some other method for solving the environmental problems rather than increasing fuel cost.
It
is argued
that the most effective solution to
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reduce
the ever-increasing
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environmental
hazards around the word is
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fuel
cost. I completely disagree with this
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idea
, and this essay will argue
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some
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other
method to decrease in
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environmental
threat.

Firstly
, transports are an essential in the ever-increasing
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environmental
pollution threat throughout the world;
therefore
,
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people
are encouraged
to
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use
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other
alternative means of transport save money. The
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use
of petroleum and gasoline can emit toxic chemicals into
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environmental
air, and it is destroying our
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lives
. Increasing the price of
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fuel
is not
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good
the best way
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because
this solution would happen several social disagreements and resentment.
For instance
, raising
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fuel
cost affect in the financial families.
Furthermore
, even if the price
were increased
,
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people
would
still
travel on a daily basics.

Secondly
, one of the
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other
ways to
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prevent
the ever-increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
threat is that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should impose strict regulations of restricting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private vehicles.
In addition
,
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people
are urged
to
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use
public transportation
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because
this leads to relieve the heavy
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traffic and
we can protect better the environment.
For example
, going cycling contribute to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the environment, and it is
environmentally
friendly.
Moreover
, the responsibility to protect the environment should fall upon the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and individuals;
thus
, everyone needs to increase awareness among solving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
hazards.

In conclusion
, the price of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
is not the best way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the ever-increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
hazards. There is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
method for solving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
problems
rather
than increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
cost.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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Lexical Resource: 9.0
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Task Achievement: 9.0
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