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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? You should write at least 250 words. v.4

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 4
Nowadays, environmental pollution is the most trending issue among the nations and in order to solve the problem increasing the fuel prices is considered the perfect way. In my opinion, this is not an ideal approach, hence it’s not a permanent solution and it may also destabilize the financial situation of the middle class and the families living below the poverty line. However, the rising level of pollution is the cause of concern for the whole world, but increasing the fuel prices can have adverse effects on the middle class and the families living in poverty. Since, the prices of fuel directly affect the expenditure of the industries, consequently, the prices of the daily used goods may jump beyond the affordability level of the middle class families and unbalance their financial situations. On the other hand, the people living below the poverty line may become unable to pay the public transportation fair, may also not be able to afford food for their families and eventually starve with hunger. As a result, the public will demand for the raise in their salaries and the increase in income may again bring the same situation back and the problem stays unsolved. Furthermore, this problem can only be solved, if the governments around the globe start encouraging people to use the Electric and Eco friendly vehicles by providing subsidies on their purchases, rather than the burning fuel vehicles. In addition, the governments should also motivate the production companies, which are another major source of air pollution by exempting some proportion of taxes upon using green energy. For example, solar energy, wind energy and Tidal energy. What is more, people should use public transportation more than private and should be encouraged to carpool for a regular commute to work. In conclusion, I firmly believe that increasing fuel prices is not an ideal solution and an effective approach to the issue.
Nowadays, environmental pollution is the most trending issue among the nations and in order to solve the problem increasing the
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fuel
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prices
is considered
the perfect way. In my opinion, this is not an ideal approach,
hence
it’s not a permanent solution and it may
also
destabilize the financial situation of the middle
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class
and the
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families
living below the poverty line.

However
, the rising level of pollution is the cause of concern for the whole world,
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but
increasing the
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fuel
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prices
can have adverse effects on the middle
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class
and the
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families
living in poverty. Since, the
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prices
of
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fuel
directly
affect the expenditure of the industries,
consequently
, the
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prices
of the daily
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used
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goods
may jump beyond the affordability level of the middle
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class
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families
and unbalance their financial situations.
On the other hand
, the
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people
living below the poverty line may become unable to pay the public transportation
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fair
, may
also
not be able to afford food for their
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families
and
eventually
starve with hunger.
As a result
, the public will demand for the raise in their salaries and the increase in income may again bring the same situation back and the problem stays unsolved.

Furthermore
, this problem can
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only
be solved
, if the
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governments
around the globe
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start
encouraging
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people
to
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use
the Electric and Eco friendly vehicles by providing subsidies on their
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purchases
,
rather
than the burning
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fuel
vehicles.
In addition
, the
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governments
should
also
motivate the production
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companies
, which are another major source of air pollution by exempting
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some
proportion of taxes upon using green
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energy
.
For example
, solar
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energy
, wind
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energy
and Tidal
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energy
.
What is more
,
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people
should
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use
public transportation more than private and should
be encouraged
to carpool for a regular commute to work.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that increasing
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fuel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
is not an ideal solution and an effective approach to the issue.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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