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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v.5

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 5
With the ever increasing population, the demand on the natural resources have been rising sharply. Raising the price of fuel has been considered as one of the most important steps in reducing the impact on the environment. In this essay, I will discuss the limitations of this activity and what other steps can be taken to help reclaim the mother earth. In fact, the increased prices of fuels can help reduce its consumption, which in turn can help replenish the natural fossil fuel levels of the earth. But then, there are no other major changes in other segments that it can impact. Hence there are limitations to this method. However, there are many proven ways to reduce the environmental hazards. Firstly, afforestation is a great way of dealing with elevated contamination levels and lower percentage of oxygen in the air. For example, it is widely known that the pollution levels in the world are the highest in the developing regions, wherein the deforestation levels were once the most elevated. Secondly, reducing the output of industrial waste and imposing curbs on their production is one other way to decrease the atmospheric pollution, especially in the densely populated areas. Thirdly, the emission levels of CFC gases have to be lowered drastically, to help the ozone layer build and repair its damaged portions, which in turn can allow the ultra violet rays of the sun to pass through. Likewise, there are many other ways to help reduce the impact on the environment In conclusion, in my opinion, even though by increasing the cost of fuels could help rebuild the fossil fuel levels, it has its own limitations. Thus, there are many other ways that we could do to aid the earth regain its natural form.
With the
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ever increasing
population, the demand on the natural resources have been rising
sharply
. Raising the price of
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fuel
has
been considered
as one of the most
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important
steps in reducing the impact on the environment. In this essay, I will discuss the limitations of this activity and what
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other
steps can
be taken
to
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help
reclaim the mother earth.

In fact, the increased prices of
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fuels
can
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help
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reduce
its consumption, which in turn can
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help
replenish the natural fossil
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fuel
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levels
of the earth.
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But
then, there are no
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other
major
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changes
in
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other
segments that it can impact.
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Hence
there are limitations to this method.

However
, there are
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many
proven
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ways
to
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reduce
the environmental hazards.
Firstly
, afforestation is a great
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way
of dealing with elevated contamination
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levels
and lower percentage of oxygen in the air.
For example
, it is
widely
known that the pollution
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levels
in the world are the highest in the developing regions, wherein the deforestation
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levels
were once the most elevated.
Secondly
, reducing the output of industrial waste and imposing curbs on their production is one
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other
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way
to decrease the atmospheric pollution,
especially
in the
densely
populated areas.
Thirdly
, the emission
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levels
of CFC gases
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have to
be lowered
drastically
, to
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help
the ozone layer build and repair its damaged portions, which in turn can
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allow
the
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ultra violet
rays of the sun to pass through.
Likewise
, there are
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many
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other
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ways
to
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help
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reduce
the impact on the environment

In conclusion
, in my opinion,
even though
by increasing the cost of
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fuels
could
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help
rebuild the fossil
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fuel
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levels
, it has its
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own
limitations.
Thus
, there are
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many
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other
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ways
that we could do to aid the earth regain its natural form.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8.5
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