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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.16

Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. v. 16
Many argue that extending punishment for the prisoners is the paramount way to diminish offence, whilst another portion of the population thinks of different solutions. In my opinion, elongated jail will only result in profound enrage and revenge within the caged and will rather make them offenders forever. However, approaches like skill based training and counselling can work as remedies to reduce crime. This essay would elaborate both viewpoints. To commence with, the section that stresses on extending sentences for criminals, should first analyse the consequences in detail. Not only, stretching detainment to reduce criminal acts would result in anger, agony and injustice, but also develop retaliation in the detainees. Besides, they would hold law and order responsible for this. As reciprocation, this may enhance brutality in them and they may even turn fiercer, deteriorating the situation further. For instance, in one of the recent surveys done by WCD, criminals spending more than ten years in prison tend to commit misdeed repeatedly. Thus, extending punishment would not serve as the sole solution. On the other hand, there are certainly better ways to encounter this situation. Introducing the skill based trainings during their tenure of imprisonment can help the accused get scaled up and would motivate them to be part of the main stream in the future. As an add-on, counselling can show wonders. Studies have shown a 30% decrease in crime rate, where the detainees were trained and advocated in the jail. Nevertheless, sessions on high moral values, conflict and anger management can be fruitful and would definitely help them deal with real-life concerns in an improved, amicable manner. In conclusion, recommending thoughtful and sensible handling of captives is my strong say. Extending detainment is not at all a solution and would worsen the situation. Empowering them with skills and positive attitude towards life can definitely prove vital for the community.
Many
argue that extending punishment for the prisoners is the paramount way to diminish
offence
, whilst another portion of the population
thinks
of
different
solutions. In my opinion, elongated jail will
only
result in profound enrage and revenge within the caged and will
rather
make
them offenders forever.
However
, approaches like
skill
based training and counselling can work as remedies to
reduce
crime. This essay would elaborate both viewpoints.

To commence with, the section that
stresses
on extending sentences for criminals, should
first
analyse
the consequences in detail. Not
only
, stretching detainment to
reduce
criminal acts would result in anger, agony and injustice,
but
also
develop retaliation in the detainees.
Besides
, they would hold law and order responsible for this. As reciprocation, this may enhance brutality in
them and
they may even turn fiercer, deteriorating the situation
further
.
For instance
, in one of the recent surveys done by
WCD
, criminals spending more than ten years in prison tend to commit misdeed
repeatedly
.
Thus
, extending punishment would not serve as the sole solution.

On the other hand
, there are
certainly
better ways to encounter this situation. Introducing the
skill
based trainings during their tenure of imprisonment can
help
the accused
get
scaled up and would motivate them to be part of the main stream in the future. As an
add
-on, counselling can
show
wonders. Studies have shown a 30% decrease in crime rate, where the detainees
were trained
and advocated in the jail.
Nevertheless
, sessions on high moral values, conflict and anger management can be fruitful and would definitely
help
them deal with real-life concerns in an
improved
, amicable manner.

In conclusion
, recommending thoughtful and sensible handling of captives is my strong say. Extending detainment is not at all a solution and would worsen the situation. Empowering them with
skills
and
positive
attitude towards life can definitely prove vital for the community.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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