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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v.3

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 3
There is no scope of argument that cigarette smoking is harmful both for the smoker and the people around him/her. Cigarette smoking has two major effects on non-smokers-injurious passive smoking and smoking, display that has an invitational or persuasive effect on non-smokers. I believe banning smoking in public places and offices not only will discourage smoking, but will also keep the smoking practice out of sight, though it might apparently look like transgress into smoker’s freedom. But I believe any harmful activity of a particular person or a group of people cannot be a definition of freedom. If smoking right in any place is a definition of freedom, then why not other drugs? In my opinion, every public place, including office must be smoke free. There are several reasons that government and private authorities are being stricter on smoking in offices and even in public places. Firstly, this is an accepted fact that smoking is injurious and deadly to health in several ways. Secondly, smoking causes health hazards of non-smokers who inhale smoke passively from the smokers. Thirdly, smoking has a strong psychological influence on others, particularly on children and young who learns from their elderly. Fourthly, in many countries, the cost of health care and insurance has gone up due to smoking related illnesses. So health authorities and governments are trying to have been seen that due to the restrictions, the habit of smoking is on a decline among office goers. Though non-smokers think that restricting smoking in offices and public places is a good idea, smokers often view it as an intervention into their right. Smokers argue that cigarette smoking has a direct relation to their workplace performance, though passive smoking can cause objections from colleagues. But considering the harm of smoking it should be banned. Though pressure groups such as tobacco companies may discourage restrictions on smoking, since the advantages of ban outweigh the disadvantages, mass public support such bans. Moreover, offices have the right to regulate staff behaviour and activities and governments too can ban smoking in public places for a greater societal benefit. In conclusion, restricting smoking in workplaces and in public is a good idea. I can also understand the opinion of smokers that banning smoking in such places limits their work speed, but I believe with a little practice and determination they can overcome it. So I strongly support the idea of prohibiting smoking in any public place including the office premises.
There is no scope of argument that cigarette
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smoking
is harmful both for the smoker and the
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people
around him/her. Cigarette
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smoking
has two major effects on non-smokers-injurious passive
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smoking
and
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smoking
, display that has an invitational or persuasive effect on non-smokers. I believe banning
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smoking
in
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public
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places
and
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offices
not
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only
will discourage
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smoking
,
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but
will
also
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keep
the
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smoking
practice out of sight, though it might
apparently
look like transgress into smoker’s freedom.
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But
I believe any harmful activity of a particular person or a group of
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people
cannot be a definition of freedom. If
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smoking
right in any
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place
is a definition of freedom, then why not other drugs? In my opinion, every
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public
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place
, including
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office
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must
be smoke free.

There are several reasons that
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government
and private authorities are being stricter on
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smoking
in
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offices
and even in
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public
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places
.
Firstly
, this is an
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accepted
fact that
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smoking
is injurious and deadly to
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health
in several ways.
Secondly
,
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smoking
causes
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health
hazards of non-smokers who inhale smoke
passively
from the smokers.
Thirdly
,
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smoking
has a strong psychological influence on others,
particularly
on children and young who
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learns
from their elderly.
Fourthly
, in
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many
countries, the cost of
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health
care and insurance has gone up due to
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smoking
related illnesses.
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So
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health
authorities and
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governments
are trying to have been
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seen
that due to the restrictions, the habit of
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smoking
is on a decline among
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office
goers.

Though non-smokers
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think
that restricting
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smoking
in
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offices
and
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public
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places
is a
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good
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idea
, smokers
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often
view it as an intervention into their right. Smokers argue that cigarette
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smoking
has a direct relation to their workplace performance, though passive
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smoking
can cause objections from colleagues.
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But
considering the harm of
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smoking
it should
be banned
.

Though pressure groups such as tobacco
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companies
may discourage restrictions on
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smoking
, since the advantages of ban outweigh the disadvantages, mass
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public
support such bans.
Moreover
,
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offices
have the right to regulate staff
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behaviour
and activities and
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governments
too can ban
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smoking
in
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public
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places
for a greater societal benefit.

In conclusion
, restricting
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smoking
in workplaces and in
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public
is a
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good
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idea
. I can
also
understand the opinion of smokers that banning
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smoking
in such
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places
limits their work speed,
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but
I believe with a
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little
practice and determination they can overcome it.
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So
I
strongly
support the
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idea
of prohibiting
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smoking
in any
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public
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place
including the
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office
premises.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
409 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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