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These days, many people actively support or promote a good cause, whether a worldwide concern, such as animal welfare or environmental awareness, or a local cause, such as the care of their local children’s play area, or the cleaning up of graffiti in t v.3

These days, many people actively support or promote a good cause, whether a worldwide concern, such as animal welfare or environmental awareness, or a local cause, such as the care of their local children’s play area, or the cleaning up of graffiti in t v. 3
It is our pleasure to note that many people have recently come forward to support our charitable programmes. It is our pleasure to share with our readers that people, irrespective of their ages and genders, seem to be eager to lend their helping hand in our activities. In this letter, I would like to present accomplishments of our organisation and urge the esteemed readers to participate in different activities depending on their interests. Our organization is benevolently supported by national government with allocation of funds for the improvement of living conditions in the slum areas. One of the important things that participants can do is to support our charitable organization financially. Your financial support will make sure that we can fulfill our promises without any hurdles. Secondly, the local residents can explore the possibility to be a volunteer with us. It is no secret that we need a large number of young people to properly manage our relief and charity work. Our volunteers will be responsible for transferring of books, food items, utensils etc. from one place to another. If you have any vehicle, you may bring it along with it as it will significantly enhance the effectiveness of our work. To sum up, my sincere appeal to all of the readers is to come forward and contribute to ameliorate the living and working conditions in our sub-urban areas. I would also like to request people to contact us at our office if you wish to donate anything to us. We are looking forward to seeing your active participation.
It is our pleasure to note that
many
people
have recently
come
forward to support our charitable
programmes
. It is our pleasure to share with our readers that
people
, irrespective of their ages and genders, seem to be eager to lend their helping hand in our activities. In this letter, I would like to present accomplishments of our
organisation
and urge the esteemed readers to participate in
different
activities depending on their interests. Our
organization
is
benevolently
supported by national
government
with allocation of funds for the improvement of living conditions in the slum areas.

One of the
important
things that participants can do is to support our charitable
organization
financially
. Your financial support will
make
sure that we can fulfill our promises without any hurdles.

Secondly
, the local residents can explore the possibility to be a volunteer with us. It is no secret that we need
a large number of
young
people
to
properly
manage our relief and charity work. Our volunteers will be responsible for transferring of books, food items, utensils etc. from one place to another. If you have any vehicle, you may bring it along with it as it will
significantly
enhance the effectiveness of our work.

To sum up, my sincere appeal to
all of the
readers is to
come
forward and contribute to ameliorate the living and working conditions in our sub-urban areas. I would
also
like to request
people
to contact us at our office if you wish to donate anything to us. We are looking forward to seeing your active participation.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay These days, many people actively support or promote a good cause, whether a worldwide concern, such as animal welfare or environmental awareness, or a local cause, such as the care of their local children’s play area, or the cleaning up of graffiti in t v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
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