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These days, in many countries few people want to become teachers. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? v.2

These days, in many countries few people want to become teachers. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? v. 2
Teachers have always played an important role in the development of growing populations. However, some politicians warn that the interest in this job is decreasing in popularity in numerous parts of the world. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons for this and suggest some possible solutions. Let us start with factors why few people decide to take the role of teacher. The first cause is that it does not offer large salaries. Most young people choose other majors, when they apply to universities, because they realize that the average income of teachers is insufficient to lead a normal life. Another reason is that it is complicated with paperwork. People give preferences to other specialties, since they see how teachers are overload with documents, which they usually do overtime at home. Therefore, after analyzing, it is clear that why teaching is losing its popularity. Nevertheless, some principles offer the following steps to deal with this problem. Firstly, the government should increase their salary. To attract more students into teaching profession, authorities should allocate more funding to enlarge their earning. Secondly, it should also exempt teachers from paperwork. To make teaching more interesting to people, officials should employ extra staff for school to shift filling documents to other people. As a result, after considering, it is obvious that the likelihood of the government to solve this problem is possible. In conclusion, even though there are plenty of reasons that contribute to the little interest in teaching, I think that it is highly probable to handle this complication, if authorities take the above mentioned measures.
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Teachers
have always played an
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important
role in the development of growing populations.
However
,
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some
politicians warn that the interest in this job is decreasing in popularity in numerous parts of the world. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons for this and suggest
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some
possible solutions.

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Let
us
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start
with factors why few
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people
decide to take the role of
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teacher
. The
first
cause is that it does not offer large salaries. Most young
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people
choose other majors, when they apply to universities,
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because
they realize that the average income of
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teachers
is insufficient to lead a normal life. Another reason is that it
is complicated
with paperwork.
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People
give preferences to other specialties, since they
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see
how
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teachers
are overload with documents, which they
usually
do overtime at home.
Therefore
, after analyzing, it is
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clear
that why
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teaching
is losing its popularity.

Nevertheless
,
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some
principles offer the following steps to deal with this problem.
Firstly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should increase their salary. To attract more students into
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teaching
profession, authorities should allocate more funding to enlarge their earning.
Secondly
, it should
also
exempt
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teachers
from paperwork. To
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make
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teaching
more interesting to
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people
, officials should employ extra staff for school to shift filling documents to other
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people
.
As a result
, after considering, it is obvious that the likelihood of the
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government
to solve this problem is possible.

In conclusion
,
even though
there are
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plenty
of reasons that contribute to the
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little
interest in
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teaching
, I
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think
that it is
highly
probable to handle this complication, if authorities take the above mentioned measures.
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IELTS essay These days, in many countries few people want to become teachers. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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