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These days, many people actively support or promote a good cause, whether a worldwide concern, such as animal welfare or environmental awareness, or a local cause, such as the care of their local children’s play area, or the cleaning up of graffiti in t v.1

These days, many people actively support or promote a good cause, whether a worldwide concern, such as animal welfare or environmental awareness, or a local cause, such as the care of their local children’s play area, or the cleaning up of graffiti in t v. 1
One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether consumers are tricked by different forms of advertisement into buying goods unreasonably or that advertisement helps them make informed decisions to buy what they want. I partially agree with the latter opinion due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that advertisement agencies, nowadays have become extremely clever in convincing people to buy certain products. People often have this opinion because many people are making purchases that simply do not reflect any of their personal or household needs. A second point is that many advertising agencies are now using subliminal messages to convince consumers subconsciously to buy products that they may not really want. A particularly good example here is a non-formal study conducted in the USA that revealed that 25% of the goods bought by an average American household was not necessary. Thus, it goes without saying that this viewpoint is credible and realistic too. On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that the benefits of advertisement considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that there are many products competing for the consumer undivided attention. It is also possible to say that there are a lot of new useful products coming out every day, and the only way to know more information about them is through advertisements. One good illustration of this is the promotion of new medications to prescribing doctors and educating them about the benefits of these medications to patients. Therefore, it is easy to see why this argument has gained support. After having discussed the most pertinent points of this issue, I feel that the only logical conclusion is that the advantages brought about by advertisements such as helping people make informed decisions regarding a certain product outweigh their disadvantages. Hence, I am partially inclined to the opinion that advertisement is beneficial to the society.
One of the
highly
controversial issues
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today
relates to whether consumers
are tricked
by
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different
forms of
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advertisement
into buying
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goods
unreasonably
or that
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advertisement
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helps
them
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make
informed decisions to
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buy
what they want. I
partially
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agree
with the latter opinion due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that
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advertisement
agencies, nowadays have become
extremely
clever in convincing
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people
to
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buy
certain
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products
.
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People
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often
have this opinion
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because
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many
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people
are making
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purchases
that
simply
do not reflect any of their personal or household needs. A second point is that
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many
advertising agencies are
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now
using subliminal messages to convince consumers
subconsciously
to
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buy
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products
that they may not
really
want. A
particularly
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good
example here is a non-formal study conducted in the USA that revealed that 25% of the
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goods
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bought
by an average American household was not necessary.
Thus
, it goes without saying that this viewpoint is credible and realistic too.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to
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make
the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that the benefits of
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advertisement
considerably
outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that there are
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many
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products
competing for the consumer undivided attention. It is
also
possible to say that there are
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a lot of
new useful
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products
coming out every day, and the
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only
way to know more information about them is through
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advertisements
. One
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good
illustration of this is the promotion of new medications to prescribing doctors and educating them about the benefits of these medications to patients.
Therefore
, it is easy to
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see
why this argument has gained support.

After having discussed the most pertinent points of this issue, I feel that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
logical conclusion is that the advantages brought about by
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advertisements
such as helping
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
informed decisions regarding a certain
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product
outweigh their disadvantages.
Hence
, I am
partially
inclined to the opinion that
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advertisement
is beneficial to the society.
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IELTS essay These days, many people actively support or promote a good cause, whether a worldwide concern, such as animal welfare or environmental awareness, or a local cause, such as the care of their local children’s play area, or the cleaning up of graffiti in t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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