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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion v.2

These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. 2
It is undeniable that education has a massive influence on our life, career and any type of education has benefits to students. In present time, online courses are well spread among students. However, some of scholars opt this while others believe delivering lectures is a very valid process. I think that computer delivering lectures are more competent. Virtual lessons at universities are attractive for several reasons. Computer delivering lessons can tackle problems such as; health issues, transportation, renting, monetary problems…. For instance, an international student who lives in foreign states sometimes are not able to reach this far distance for less funding can not attend lecture. Moreover, low salary and funding of teenagers are the main reasons that should be taken into consideration. In this case, low spending on transportation and renting are good reasons why students do prefer the new type of education. Briefly, internet based sessions are reasonable and affordable choice. One the other hand, lectures held by lecturers at universities can be a good way of educating younger on their behaviour and cognitive skills. Active sessions at universities are much more interesting and interactive which can reshape students both cognitive and soft skills. Moreover, active listeners tend to be more ambitious when they feel real competitive atmosphere while lessons. For instance, according to a recent report on the BBC, nearly 68% of gaining information during active sessions are remains in memory while virtual sessions it seems impossible. In short, attendants can emphasize the supremacy of knowledge only in university-based lectures. In conclusion, it seems to me that students do benefit on virtual sessions more than lectures. These way of educating can also lead a successful career likewise to university based lectures
It is undeniable that education has a massive influence on our life, career and any type of education has benefits to
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students
. In present time, online courses are well spread among
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students
.
However
,
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some of scholars
opt this while others believe delivering
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lectures
is a
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very
valid process. I
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think
that computer delivering
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lectures
are more competent.

Virtual lessons at
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universities
are attractive for several reasons. Computer delivering lessons can tackle problems such as; health issues, transportation, renting, monetary problems….
For instance
, an international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in foreign states
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
are not able to reach this far distance for less funding can not attend
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lecture
.
Moreover
, low salary and funding of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
are the main reasons that should
be taken
into consideration.
In this case
, low spending on transportation and renting are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
reasons why
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students
do prefer the new type of education.
Briefly
, internet based
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sessions
are reasonable and affordable choice.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the other hand,
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lectures
held by lecturers at
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universities
can be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way of educating younger on their
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behaviour
and cognitive
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skills
. Active
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sessions
at
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universities
are much more interesting and interactive which can reshape
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
both cognitive and soft
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
Moreover
, active listeners tend to be more ambitious when they feel real competitive atmosphere while lessons.
For instance
, according to a recent report on the BBC,
nearly
68% of gaining information during active
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sessions
are remains in memory while virtual
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sessions
it seems impossible. In short, attendants can emphasize the supremacy of knowledge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in university-based lectures.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that
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students
do benefit on virtual
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sessions
more than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
.
Did you mean "this way" or "These ways"?
These way
of educating can
also
lead a successful career
likewise
to
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university
based
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
lectures
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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