In the developed world, average life expactancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that caould be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations. v.1
In the developed world, average life expactancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that caould be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations. v. 1
In modern life, human's lifespan has significantly improved than before. Due to medical achieving, economical improvements and increasing life quality in the last decades. This has made two major problems for people and communities, and I think one key issue should be implemented to tackle them.
Of course, for the nine from ten youngsters, a long lifespan is the damnable target, but it has some negative effects for individuals and also society. For example, firstly, it can be an excessive financial burden on society and working people, because in my country there is a such a law that it is the "must" thing for government workers to give some kind of percent of their salary for people who unable to afford them with properties and medical items. Secondly, as elderly people are more sensitive to be sick. They are liable to catch some incurable disease, for example, nowadays like in all the countries of the world in my hometown also there is being an epidemical illness like " Koronavirus" (COVID-19). The latest research found that the most amount of infected people is studied, old people are being the most amount of infected and carriers of that virus.
However, in my opinion, only one solution that should be addressed with problems, is increasing in the standard pension age of people. For example, in most countries, the average retirement age is 55 years old, and it should be extended to 60 or 65 years old, if they are able for working. Therefore, it would reduce the government's and also youngsters' and excessive financial burden.
In conclusion, there is a huge financial impact on communities and people, it can easily be overcome by increasing elderly people's retirement age. 
In modern life, human's lifespan has  
significantly
  improved
 than  
before
. Due to medical achieving, economical improvements and increasing life quality in the last decades. This has made two major problems for  
people
 and communities, and I  
think
 one key issue should  
be implemented
 to tackle them. 
Of course
, for the nine from ten youngsters, a long lifespan is the damnable target,  
but
 it has  
some
  negative
 effects for individuals and  
also
 society.  
For example
,  
firstly
, it can be an excessive financial burden on society and working  
people
,  
because
 in my country there is a such a law that it is the  
"
 must
 "
 thing for  
government
 workers to give  
some
 kind of percent of their salary for  
people
 who unable to afford them with properties and medical items.  
Secondly
, as elderly  
people
 are more sensitive to be sick. They are liable to catch  
some
 incurable disease,  
for example
, nowadays like in all the countries of the world in my hometown  
also
 there is being an  
epidemical
 illness like  
" 
 Koronavirus
 "
 (COVID-19). The latest research found that the most amount of infected  
people
  is studied
,  
old
  people
 are being the most amount of infected and carriers of that virus. 
However
, in my opinion,  
only
 one solution that should  
be addressed
 with problems, is increasing in the standard pension age of  
people
.  
For example
, in most countries, the average retirement age is 55 years  
old
, and it should  
be extended
 to 60 or 65 years  
old
, if they are able for working.  
Therefore
, it would  
reduce
 the  
government
's and  
also
 youngsters' and excessive financial burden. 
In conclusion
, there is a huge financial impact on communities and  
people
, it can  
easily
  be overcome
 by increasing elderly  
people
's retirement age. 
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