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These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both v.3

These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. 3
Today, many students, instead of applying for on-campus courses, choose online courses as they do not have to go to universities, while others think that it is important to attend lectures. In my view, the traditional way is still better. In the age of technology, there are more and more new ways to educate people based on technology, for example, teaching and learning on the Internet. Many large universities, such as Stanford University, organize online courses, for instance MOOC courses and accept the value of education of MOOC degrees. Therefore, many students choose this way of learning. This may be also because the tuition fees of online education are cheaper or due to large geographic distance if students want to study abroad. Meanwhile, many others still prefer studying at university, because there they can contact better with their teachers and classmates. Also, there are a lot of activities and clubs for on-campus students to take part in so they can improve their skills better than when they study online. To students who take courses at foreign schools, it is a good chance for them to learn how to be independent, manage their lives and open their minds when they are in whole new place. In my opinion, although learning on the Internet is convenient and it can help save a lot of money, it is important to go to university. We can study much more when we take courses there than just what are in books and of course, there are more chance to get good jobs after graduate.
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universities
, while others
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important
to attend lectures. In my view, the traditional way is
still
better.

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people
based on technology,
for example
, teaching and learning on the Internet.
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large
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universities
, such as Stanford
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University
, organize
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online
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courses
,
for instance
MOOC
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courses
and accept the value of education of MOOC degrees.
Therefore
,
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many
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students
choose this way of learning. This may be
also
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because
the tuition fees of
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online
education are cheaper or due to large geographic distance if
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students
want to study abroad.

Meanwhile,
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many
others
still
prefer studying at
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university
,
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because
there they can contact better with their teachers and classmates.
Also
, there are
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a lot of
activities and clubs for on-campus
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students
to
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take part
in
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so
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improve
their
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skills
better than when they study
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online
. To
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students
who take
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courses
at foreign schools, it is a
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good
chance for them to learn how to be independent, manage their
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lives
and open their minds when they are in whole new place.

In my opinion, although learning on the Internet is convenient and it can
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help
save
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a lot of
money, it is
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important
to go to
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university
. We can study much more when we take
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courses
there than
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just
what are in books and of
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course
, there are more chance to
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get
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good
jobs after graduate.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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