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There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.1

There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
Nowadays, many young people in modern society decide to become parents when they get older. This essay will provide some explanation relate to this trend, and its effects on society and family life. A few reasons can be given to explain why many young people choose to have children later. Firstly, having early children is one of the reasons which cause people to lose their freedom. For instance, young couples in America usually tend to delay childbirth because they want to spend their leisure time for travelling or discovering amazing things. Second, economic condition plays a vital role in bringing up a child. Young people hope that they will have a more perfect life for their children in the future. Therefore, when people are young, they would like to concentrate on developing their career. Delaying childbirth brings both the pros and cons on society and family life. On the one hand, if children were born from older parents who can provide more comprehensive education for them; this leads to in the future when these children grow up, they will contribute a great deal of benefits to the society. On the other hand, having children late will have impacts of moms’ health. To illustrate, when an older woman is pregnant, she has to face with developing diseases, such as higher blood pressure, diabetes and other underlying health conditions. In conclusion, there is a tendency for people to have children later in their life. Young people want to enjoy their life before having children, but this trend has its advantage and disadvantage in society and family life.
Nowadays,
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in modern
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decide to become parents when they
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get
older. This essay will provide
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relate to this trend, and its effects on
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and family life.

A few reasons can be
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why
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choose to have
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later.
Firstly
, having early
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children
is one of the reasons which cause
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people
to lose their freedom.
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young
couples in America
usually
tend to delay childbirth
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because
they want to spend their leisure time for travelling or discovering amazing things. Second, economic condition plays a vital role in bringing up a child.
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people
hope that they will have a more perfect
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life
for their
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children
in the future.
Therefore
, when
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people
are
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young
, they would like to concentrate on developing their career.

Delaying childbirth brings both the pros and cons on
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society
and family
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life
. On the one hand, if
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children
were born
from older parents who can provide more comprehensive education for them; this leads to in the future when these
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children
grow up, they will contribute a great deal of benefits to the
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society
.
On the other hand
, having
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children
late will have impacts of moms’ health. To illustrate, when an older woman is pregnant, she
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has to
face with developing diseases, such as higher blood pressure, diabetes and other underlying health conditions.

In conclusion
, there is a tendency for
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people
to have
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children
later in their
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life
.
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people
want to enjoy their
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life
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before
having
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children
,
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this trend has its advantage and disadvantage in
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society
and family
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life
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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