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Do you agree or disagree with the given statement? There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach to an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples. v.1

There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach to an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples. v. 1
Individual wellbeing is an extremely significant aspect for everyone. However, It is argued whether an individual is responsible for this himself or there are vital external components which contribute to his happiness. This essay will oppose these views and explain why both of these factors play a key role in one's well being. To begin with, it might be justified, why a person needs certain aspects to feel happy. Indeed, basic life needs definitely should be met as such factors, like hunger or absence of home or close people, pose obstacles for one to live to the fullest. To illustrate, It is not lack of internal motivation which makes starving children of Africa feel miserable, but their current situation that threats their lives. Thus, certain components of life do have to be present for people to be delighted. However, it is by no means the case that if a person is well-off and lives in prosperity, he will not blame the fate for his unhappiness. In the light of the fast pace of life some people have forgotten how to enjoy simple things, such as the presence of food, home and family, which they might not have had, if they have occurred to be in the different circumstances. For instance, even the wealthiest people may suffer from depression while having everything to feel happy and grateful to their fate. Thereby, people should have the internal ability to accept the situation which might not be as perfect as they think and to be satisfied with what they have. To conclude, individual happiness is immensely significant factor for everyone, which is, although, stems from both: external factors like basic life needs and one's responsibility for his own happiness.
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wellbeing
is an
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significant aspect for everyone.
However
, It
is argued
whether an individual is responsible for this himself or there are vital external components which contribute to his happiness. This essay will oppose these views and
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explain
why both of these
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factors
play a key role in one's
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well being
.

To
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begin
with, it might
be justified
, why a person needs certain aspects to feel happy.
Indeed
, basic
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life
needs definitely should
be met
as such
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factors
, like hunger or absence of home or close
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people
, pose obstacles for one to
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live
to the fullest. To illustrate, It is not lack of internal motivation which
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makes
starving children of Africa feel miserable,
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but
their
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current
situation that threats their
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lives
.
Thus
, certain components of
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life
do
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have to
be present for
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people
to
be delighted
.

However
, it is by no means the case that if a person is well-off and
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lives
in prosperity, he will not blame the fate for his unhappiness. In the light of the
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fast
pace of
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life
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some
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people
have forgotten how to enjoy simple things, such as the presence of food, home and family, which they might not have had, if they have occurred to be in the
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different
circumstances.
For instance
, even the wealthiest
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people
may suffer from depression while having everything to feel happy and grateful to their fate. Thereby,
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people
should have the internal ability to accept the situation which might not be as perfect as they
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think
and to
be satisfied
with what they have.

To conclude
, individual happiness is
immensely
significant
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factor
for everyone, which is, although, stems from both: external
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factors
like basic
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life
needs and one's responsibility for his
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own
happiness.
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IELTS essay There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach to an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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