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There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.2

There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2
Education is an important aspect in human’s life. Education can either be obtained from formal education institution, like schools or universities, or other people experience. Some people argue that uneducated people cannot teach educated person. However, in my opinion, uneducated people can still teach some other things that are not taught in education curriculum to educated people. First, honesty is a personal character that can be taught outside schools. Anyone, including uneducated people, can teach the importance of being honest in daily life. Educated people may neglect this basic principle because of profit or social factor. Otherwise, uneducated people can show that honesty can bring many benefits, monetary and non-monetary, in people lives. Second, uneducated people usually live in tougher living condition. Because of the limitation to education institution, they do not have adequate knowledge and soft skills to do corporate job. As a result, most of them work in jobs that depend mainly on hard skills, like carpenter or welder. Therefore, they can teach educated people how to do those hard-skilled jobs. Third, uneducated people can teach about their origin culture. For example, they can teach their mother tongue language to foreign travelers. People in rural areas where access to education is limited can also teach domestic traditions, beliefs or rituals. In conclusion, people who have limited access to education may not be able to teach sophisticated skills related to subjects in school’s curriculum, but they can share many important knowledge from their personal experience that can be useful for educated people.
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Education
is an
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important
aspect in human’s life.
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can either
be obtained
from formal
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education
institution, like schools or universities, or other
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people
experience.
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Some
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people
argue that
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uneducated
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people
cannot
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teach
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educated
person.
However
, in my opinion,
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uneducated
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people
can
still
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teach
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some
other things that are not taught in
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education
curriculum to
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educated
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people
.

First
, honesty is a personal character that can
be taught
outside schools. Anyone, including
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uneducated
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people
, can
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teach
the importance of being honest in daily life.
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Educated
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people
may neglect this basic principle
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because
of profit or social factor.
Otherwise
,
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uneducated
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people
can
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show
that honesty can bring
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many
benefits, monetary and non-monetary, in
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people
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lives
.

Second,
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uneducated
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people
usually
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live
in tougher living condition.
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Because
of the limitation to
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education
institution, they do not have adequate knowledge and soft
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skills
to do corporate job.
As a result
, most of them work in jobs that depend
mainly
on
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hard
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skills
, like carpenter or welder.
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, they can
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teach
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educated
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people
how to do those
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hard
-skilled jobs.

Third,
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uneducated
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people
can
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teach
about their origin culture.
For example
, they can
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teach
their mother tongue language to foreign travelers.
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People
in rural areas where access to
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education
is limited
can
also
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teach
domestic traditions, beliefs or rituals.

In conclusion
,
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people
who have limited access to
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education
may not be able to
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teach
sophisticated
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skills
related to subjects in school’s curriculum,
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but
they can share
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many
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important
knowledge from their personal experience that can be useful for
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educated
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people
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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