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There is no need to maintain a close relationship with distant relatives. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

There is no need to maintain a close relationship with distant relatives. v. 1
It is supported that maintain a close relationship with distinct relatives is not really essential in our daily life. In my perspective, I partly agree with this opinion. In this essay, I am going to explain about this idea carefully by giving more details. Nowadays, people are stressed out with their busy and pressure life so it is difficult for them to maintain unnecessary relationship, especially with unsimilar family members. Usually, preserve connection with those don’t provide you comfortable when communicate may lead you to the feeling of unwanted and tired. Therefore, you won’t feel satisfy when meet them anymore, because of distinct idea and lifestyle. For instance, probably you never want to be a good friend with your wacky and unusual cousin, who is much different from you, a tradition person. As a result, trying to maintain good and close relationship with distinct relatives may provide you intolerable and unbearable emotion. However, it is disrespectful if you behave indecorously with your relative by spurn them. In many countries, it is seem to be that children should be amiably with everyone in their family, never mind that if they have close relationship with them not. Being generous with everyone in your family not just represent that you are educated, but also your family breeding. This opinion invisibly make children, in particular teenagers feel unsatisfied and distasteful in family meeting. Altogether, being a perfect person with your distinct family member is not an easy thing to do. In conclusion, everybody should not maintain an uncomfortable connection with your different family members. Otherwise, they ought to behave rightly with them as polite as possible.
It
is supported
that
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maintain
a close
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relationship
with
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distinct
relatives is not
really
essential in our daily life. In my perspective, I partly
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agree
with this opinion. In this essay, I am going to
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explain
about this
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idea
carefully
by giving more
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details
.

Nowadays,
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people
are
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stressed
out with their busy and pressure life
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so
it is difficult for them to
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maintain
unnecessary
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relationship
,
especially
with
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unsimilar
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family
members.
Usually
, preserve connection with those don’t provide you comfortable when communicate may lead you to the feeling of unwanted and tired.
Therefore
, you won’t feel satisfy when
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meet
them anymore,
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because
of
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distinct
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idea
and lifestyle.
For instance
,
probably
you never want to be a
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good
friend with your wacky and unusual cousin, who is much
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different
from you, a tradition person.
As a result
, trying to
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maintain
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good
and close
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relationship
with
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distinct
relatives may provide you intolerable and unbearable emotion.

However
, it is disrespectful if you behave
indecorously
with your relative by spurn them. In
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many
countries, it is
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seem
to be that children should be
amiably
with everyone in their
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family
, never mind that if they have close
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relationship
with them not. Being generous with everyone in your
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family
not
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just
represent that you
are educated
,
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but
also
your
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family
breeding. This opinion
invisibly
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make
children,
in particular
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teenagers
feel unsatisfied and distasteful in
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family
meeting. Altogether, being a perfect person with your
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distinct
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family
member is not an easy thing to do.

In conclusion
, everybody should not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
maintain
an uncomfortable connection with your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members.
Otherwise
, they ought to behave
rightly
with them as polite as possible.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay There is no need to maintain a close relationship with distant relatives. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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