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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? v. 2
Research has stated, that human activities have resulted in global warming. There are several reasons for the earth's temperature to increase. The ways to combat the rising degree will be discussed further. The melting of polar ice caps, drew the attention of scientists. This was caused as a result of the dip in temperature. The entrapment of greenhouse gases on the surface of the earth has led to increase in heat and decrease in cool climates. For example, the thawing of cool regions increases sea levels, and results in a tsunami destroying millions of lives. Since, man uses excessive carbon dioxide through products like air conditioners the gases emitted from it are harmful to the environment. The burning of fossil fuels, especially petrol has been a matter of concern for a long time and its depletion is alarming. The solution to the increasing climate change is tackling the problem in various ways. For example: instead of using petrol, automotive experts have come up with an alternative source. Solar energy obtained from the sun has been yet another invention to replace the use of power and electricity. On an individual level, people are urged to plant trees in abundance as plants inhale carbon dioxide and exhale oxygen. In addition to this method wealthy citizens are urged to reduce their use of cooling systems. There is proof that the careless attitude of man is causing destruction of the only planet he can call home. Steps adhered to, will ensure the survival of man in the long run.
Research has stated, that human activities have resulted in global warming. There are several reasons for the earth's temperature to increase. The ways to combat the rising degree will
be discussed
further
.

The melting of polar ice caps, drew the attention of scientists. This
was caused
as a result
of the dip in temperature. The entrapment of greenhouse gases on the surface of the earth has led to increase in heat and decrease in cool climates.
For example
, the thawing of cool regions increases sea levels, and results in a tsunami destroying millions of
lives
.
Since
,
man
uses
excessive carbon dioxide through products like air conditioners the gases emitted from it are harmful to the environment. The burning of fossil fuels,
especially
petrol has been a matter of concern for a long time and its depletion is alarming.

The solution to the increasing climate
change
is tackling the problem in various ways.
For example
:
instead
of using petrol, automotive experts have
come
up with an alternative source. Solar energy obtained from the sun has been
yet
another invention to replace the
use
of power and electricity. On an individual level,
people
are urged
to plant trees in abundance as plants inhale carbon dioxide and exhale oxygen.
In addition
to this method wealthy citizens
are urged
to
reduce
their
use
of cooling systems.

There is proof that the careless attitude of
man
is causing destruction of the
only
planet he can call home. Steps adhered to, will ensure the survival of
man
in the long run.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
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