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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your an v.45

There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your an v. 45
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It is
commonly
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seen
most
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individuals
spend a tremendous amount of funds to have grate
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matrimonies
. Although on the one hand, it is reasonable to celebrate the most wonderful
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event
of their life with their family and friends.
However
, I believe spending
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so
much cash to celebrate
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only
one great day of life cannot be
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accepted
.

Firstly
,
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many
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individuals
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used
to have bank loans to
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get
an enormous
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wedding
,
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but
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sometimes
, it is
extremely
beyond their level. Most of the time those who
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get
loans, will not able to
properly
pay after the
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wedding and
they
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have to
struggle with those debts which can lead to family problems. As a consequence of it, those
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individuals
will not able to spend
happily
married life with those money issues. As an example, without money, those couples will not able to fulfil their
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day to day
needs like food, medical and other services.
Moreover
, debs can be an effect on the development of the family
The adverb 'hardly' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
hardly
.

Secondly
, to spend a huge amount of funds for a simple party cannot be
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accepted
.
Clearly
, In the general population,
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many
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individuals
suffer from poverty.
For instance
,
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some
children don't have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
resources and funds to achieve their goals and dreams. As an example, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
talented children in the world, which does not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
resources to study. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to
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help
those
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people
instead
of wasting wealth on partying is a grate humanity service that those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wedding
couples can
be satisfied
in their lifetime.

Finally
, I believe spending a tremendous amount of cash on one matrimonial, better that has a simple
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wedding
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
or
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use
those funds to have a great living is the best thing to do.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your an v. 45

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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