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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? v.3

There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? v. 3
Despite knowing about climate change, human activities have been causing global temperatures higher. This essay will examine the main causes of this actual issue and possible solutions. The two main causes of higher temperatures are globalisation and deforestation. Firstly, overpopulation are the major issues of environment. People must be feed and dress, for this reason industries produces continuously and they generate pollution and waste. According to Jack Prevost a searcher from the CNRS, 90% of the climate change is due to pollution. It is estimated that 60% of this pollution is released in the form of harmful clouds and 40% is caused by chemical products dumped in river and sea. The searcher wrote in this article that industries and transport are the main factors. Secondly, industries and household habits must destroy trees to produce energy. However, it releases CO2 in the air and this will increase the temperatures and cause global warming. For instance, in the UK a searcher from Oxford university publish an article on the future scientist magazine where he estimates that the level of temperature will reach a peak in 2050. Consequently, people and industries have to change their habits because they consume more than they need. Today, we use all our essential resources, but what do we will delegate to our descendant? Any possible solution to this problem to limit production and make more propaganda about the environment. Currently, it is estimated that only 60% of the global production is used by consumers. The 30% are throw and only a few percent is recycled. I believe that if overconsumtion are limiting the energy used and amount of pollution will considerably decrease. For example, in Norway, the government encouraged local production and have waste and pollution policy. Moreover, this effort should also ne done by the population they should recycle and limit their purchases to the strict minimum. To support this argument we can retake the instance of suede where the government makes a lot of propaganda to sensibilise people with environment issues. In conclusion, people’s activities have a negative impact on the environment and that level up global temperatures. In this essay, we discussed two mains causes: globalisation and deforestation if it is managed correctly by limiting production and make more propaganda to sensibilise the population global warming will thus be avoided.
Despite knowing about climate
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change
, human activities have been causing
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global
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temperatures
higher. This essay will examine the
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main
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causes
of this actual issue and possible solutions.

The two
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main
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causes
of higher
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temperatures
are
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globalisation
and deforestation.
Firstly
, overpopulation are the major issues of
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environment
.
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People
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must
be feed
and dress,
for this reason
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industries
produces
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continuously and
they generate
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pollution
and waste. According to Jack
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Prevost
a searcher from the CNRS, 90% of the climate
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change
is due to
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pollution
. It
is estimated
that 60% of this
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pollution
is released
in the form of harmful clouds and 40%
is caused
by chemical products dumped in river and sea. The searcher wrote in this article that
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industries
and transport are the
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main
factors.
Secondly
,
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industries
and household habits
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must
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destroy
trees to produce energy.
However
, it releases CO2 in the air and this will increase the
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temperatures
and
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cause
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global
warming.
For instance
, in the UK a searcher from Oxford university publish an article on the future scientist magazine where he estimates that the level of
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temperature
will reach a peak in 2050.
Consequently
,
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people
and
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industries
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have to
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change
their habits
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because
they consume more than they need.
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Today
, we
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use
all our essential resources,
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but
what do we will delegate to our descendant?

Any possible solution to this problem to limit
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production
and
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make
more propaganda about the
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environment
.
Currently
, it
is estimated
that
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only
60% of the
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global
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production
is
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used
by consumers. The 30% are throw and
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only
a
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few percent
is recycled
. I believe that if
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overconsumtion
are limiting the energy
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used
and amount of
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pollution
will
considerably
decrease.
For example
, in Norway, the
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government
encouraged local
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production
and have waste and
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pollution
policy.
Moreover
, this effort should
also
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ne
done by the population they should recycle and limit their
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purchases
to the strict minimum. To support this argument we can retake the instance of suede where the
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government
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makes
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a lot of
propaganda to
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sensibilise
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people
with
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environment
issues.

In conclusion
,
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people’s
activities have a
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negative
impact on the
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environment
and that level up
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global
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temperatures
. In this essay, we discussed two
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mains
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causes
:
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globalisation
and deforestation if it
is managed
correctly
by limiting
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production
and
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make
more propaganda to
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sensibilise
the population
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global
warming will
thus
be avoided
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
386 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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