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Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people's lives are affected by the robots, with many advances in this field. However, while these developments have brought many benefits to the world. In this essay I will describe both points of view before explaining why I believe the benefits of robots outweigh the disadvantages. Some people believe that there are two main reasons why robots might have adverse effects on society in the future. The main issue is that people feel the robots will have a negative impact on the human workforce. Workers will be replaced by machines and this will increase the unemployment rate, it leads to more serious problems such as poverty and increased crimes. Furthermore, physical and health issues are a major concern, as people become less active and this may result in some health problems like obesity. However, others feel that robots will play important positive roles in future society. The first role is that robots could operate in locations that humans cannot reach such as exploration of the outer space. Moreover, robots will be used inside the human bodies for monitoring their health and undertaking surgery. The second role that will be played by robots is helping of the elderly and retired people with their daily life activities like cooking and cleaning. Finally, robots could do normal jobs quickly unlike human beings. Robots not complain or get distracted or tired. They readily work twenty-four hours a day and require minimal maintenance. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against the role of robots in our future would, but I believe that the robots will add many benefits to the future society.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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