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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v.23

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 23
Owing to the benefits of an excellent care and the faster achievement of goals, there is a rising trend of small families around the globe. However, there are also drawbacks to this. One evident benefit of having a small family instead of a large family is that it offers an excellent caring system. In other words, this type of family mostly consists of the nuclear family, which are usually fathers, mothers and children, and little efforts made by the leaders there are enough to sustain them. Unlike in a large family where, despite all ways of improving care, there is always not sufficient care gotten. Besides, there is also the quick accomplishment of dreams in a small family when compared to a large family due to lower responsibilities most done. As a result, goals are promptly achieved with little efforts. Nevertheless, having a small family has several downsides. Firstly, in the timed of need, especially in an emergency, helping hands are not easily seen as there are no people around to help, but this is impossible in large families. This could lead to serious issues, such as death or attack, especially with people with debilitating diseases, for example, hypertension and asthma. Secondly, low or no social lifestyle is another drawback to this, and this is caused as a result of a lack of communication. Therefore, it could result in loneliness and depression. In conclusion, it is evidently clear that even though there are several plus points of owning a small family, there are disadvantages of little or no social style of living and absence of help in periods of need.
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families
around the globe.
However
, there are
also
drawbacks to this.

One evident benefit of having a
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small
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family
instead
of a
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large
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family
is that it offers an excellent caring system.
In other words
, this type of
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family
mostly
consists of the nuclear
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family
, which are
usually
fathers, mothers and children, and
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little
efforts made by the leaders there are
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enough
to sustain them. Unlike in a
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large
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family
where, despite
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all ways
of improving care, there is always not sufficient care gotten.
Besides
, there is
also
the quick accomplishment of dreams in a
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small
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family
when compared to a
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large
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family
due to lower responsibilities most done.
As a result
, goals are
promptly
achieved with
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little
efforts.

Nevertheless
, having a
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small
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family
has several downsides.
Firstly
, in the timed of need,
especially
in an emergency, helping hands are not
easily
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seen
as there are no
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people
around to
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help
,
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but
this is impossible in
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large
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families
. This could lead to serious issues, such as death or attack,
especially
with
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people
with debilitating diseases,
for example
, hypertension and asthma.
Secondly
, low or no social lifestyle is another drawback to this, and this
is caused
as a result
of a lack of communication.
Therefore
, it could result in loneliness and depression.

In conclusion
, it is
evidently
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clear
that
even though
there are several plus points of owning a
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small
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family
, there are disadvantages of
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little
or no social style of living and absence of
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help
in periods of need.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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