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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v.1

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 1
In recent time all around the world, there has been a decrease in the number of children being born in a family as compared to the times past. Having a small family is advantageous as it is economical and children can be given a better quality life, but there are some drawbacks to be taken into consideration as well. In the first place, raising a small family is relatively cheaper as the little resources available to cater for the family can conveniently meet the needs and give the family an improved quality life. As a result, parents can provide and give their children the best education, health care treatment and vacation. As an illustration, rise in inflation rate has caused an increase in the standard of living and inorder to ensure members of a family gets adequate quality life, it's important to have a small family. Furthermore, having a small family presents the family with the opportunity to understand the emotional needs of each child and helps parents bond well with their children. On the contrary, the major setback of having a small family is the inability of the children to develop great social skills while growing up. It is often said that children learn 75% of their social value from family and the remaining percent outside the walls of their home. A home with large number of people helps a child to learn how to relate with people, understand the value of integrity, selflessness and putting people first. Consequently, a child that grow up in a small family might not be exposed to this opportunity and tend to become adults that lacks relational skills. In conclusion, while having a small family is beneficial in some ways, there is the need to be conscious of the problems associated with raising a small family such as low development of social and relational skills.
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in a
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as compared to the times past.
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a
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small
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is advantageous as it is economical and
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children
can be
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given
a better quality life,
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but
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some
drawbacks to
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as well
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first
place, raising a
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small
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family
is
relatively
cheaper as the
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little
resources available to cater for the
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can
conveniently
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meet
the needs and give the
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family
an
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improved
quality life.
As a result
, parents can provide and give their
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children
the best education, health care treatment and vacation. As an illustration, rise in inflation rate has caused an increase in the standard of living and
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inorder
to ensure members of a
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family
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gets
adequate quality life, it's
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important
to have a
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small
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family
.
Furthermore
,
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having
a
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small
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presents the
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with the opportunity to understand the emotional needs of each child and
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helps
parents bond well with their children.

On the contrary
, the major setback of
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is the inability of the
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children
to develop great social
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skills
while growing up. It is
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often
said that
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children
learn 75% of their social value from
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family
and the remaining percent outside the walls of their home. A home with large number of
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people
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helps
a child to learn how to relate with
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people
, understand the value of integrity, selflessness and putting
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people
first
.
Consequently
, a child that grow up in a
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small
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family
might not
be exposed
to this opportunity and tend to become adults that lacks relational
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skills
.

In conclusion
, while
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having
a
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small
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is beneficial in
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some
ways, there is the need to be conscious of the problems associated with raising a
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small
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family
such as low development of social and relational
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skills
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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