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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having small family rather than a large family? v.20

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having small family rather than a large family? v. 20
Traditions and customs are in a state of flux nowadays in most parts of our world. In many countries parents are choosing to have fewer children than in the past. This essay will look at the advantages and drawbacks of this changing practice. In many societies a small family is still thought of as being disadvantageous and the reasons for this are many. Firstly, there is a risk when there are only one or two children that parents will not be looked after in their old age. This is particularly true, for instance, in countries which they do not god aged care facilities. Another perceived disadvantage is that parents are afraid they will not have enough help to run their businesses if they have a small family. Being dependent on family members for this and many other chores around the house is another downside of the movement of having smaller families. However, the positives of having a small family are numerous. The first of these is the cost. Raising children is expensive, so the larger the family the greater the outlay, especially when the list of essentials that the modern family requires is long. On top of this is the time it takes to tend to all needs of many children. Parents’ days would be filled with taking them to school and extracurricular activities, juggling their time between work and trying to give each child the best in life. With only two children at most, the expenditure of money and time can be kept within reasonable limits. To conclude, the trends towards smaller families looks set to continue. This essay discussed that having a small family reduces the cost of money and time, but parents may not have a proper care when they get older as well as daily help if they choose to have fewer offspring.
Traditions and customs are in a state of flux nowadays in most parts of our world. In
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many
countries
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parents
are choosing to have fewer
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children
than in the past. This essay will look at the advantages and drawbacks of this changing practice.

In
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many
societies a
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small
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family
is
still
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thought
of as being disadvantageous and the reasons for this are
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many
.
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, there is a
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risk
when there are
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only
one or two
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children
that
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parents
will not
be looked
after in their
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old
age. This is
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true,
for instance
, in countries which they do not god aged care facilities. Another perceived disadvantage is that
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parents
are afraid they will not have
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enough
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help
to run their businesses if they have a
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small
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family
. Being dependent on
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family
members for this and
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many
other chores around the
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is another downside of the movement of having smaller families.

However
, the positives of having a
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small
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family
are numerous. The
first
of these is the cost. Raising
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children
is expensive,
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so
the larger the
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family
the greater the outlay,
especially
when the list of essentials that the modern
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family
requires is long. On top of this is the
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time
it takes to tend to all needs of
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many
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children
.
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Parents’
days would
be filled
with taking them to school and extracurricular activities, juggling their
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time
between work and trying to give each child the best in life. With
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only
two
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children
at most, the expenditure of money and
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time
can be
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kept
within reasonable limits.

To conclude
, the trends towards smaller
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families
looks set to continue. This essay discussed that having a
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small
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family
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reduces
the cost of money and
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time
,
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but
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parents
may not have a proper care when they
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get
older
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well as daily
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help
if they choose to have fewer offspring.
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IELTS essay There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having small family rather than a large family? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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