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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v.12

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 12
In the past, a family used to consist of more than five members. Nowadays, however, a growing number of people opt to raise a relatively small family instead of a big family. I will examine the merits and demerits of having a small family. On the one hand, the idea of having a small family sounds more appealing to some people due to several underlying reasons. Firstly, it is undeniable that it takes a great amount of money to raise and look after a kid. With that in mind, some couples decide to only have fewer kids as it would significantly reduce the financial burdens of a household. Secondly, taking care of a single kid, parents can give their unparalleled attention, which thus allows them to fully observe their kid’s growth. In fact, they can even facilitate their kid’s linguistic and motoric development. This parenting style can barely occur in a family that raises more than two kids. On the other hand, having a small family can pose a few challenges. To begin with, having a large family enables kids to benefit from social interaction with their siblings whereas a kid raised in a small family may occasionally feel slightly isolated. Therefore, this could possibly hamper their social development. Furthermore, if this trend continues, there is a high possibility that the number of deaths will outweigh that of births, in which case it can consequently lead to the extinction of human species. While the chance of this happening is slim to none, the potential impact of this should never be overlooked. To sum up, having considered both sides, I am firmly convinced that the benefits of having a small family outweigh the potential drawbacks associated with it. Having a small family ensures that parents can worry less about their financial circumstances and they can actively get involved in their kid’s holistic development.
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to consist of more than five members. Nowadays,
however
, a growing number of
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people
opt to raise a
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small
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family
instead
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big
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. I will examine the merits and demerits of
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having
a
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small
family.

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having
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small
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family
sounds more appealing to
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people
due to several underlying reasons.
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, it is undeniable that it takes a great amount of money to raise and look after a
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. With that in mind,
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some
couples decide to
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only
have fewer
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kids
as it would
significantly
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reduce
the financial burdens of a household.
Secondly
, taking care of a single
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kid
, parents can give their unparalleled attention, which
thus
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allows
them to
fully
observe their
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kid’s
growth. In fact, they can even facilitate their
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linguistic and
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motoric
development. This parenting style can
barely
occur in a
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family
that raises more than two kids.

On the other hand
,
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having
a
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small
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family
can pose a few challenges. To
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begin
with,
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having
a large
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family
enables
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kids
to benefit from social interaction with their siblings whereas a
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kid
raised in a
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small
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family
may
occasionally
feel
slightly
isolated.
Therefore
, this could
possibly
hamper their social development.
Furthermore
, if this trend continues, there is a high possibility that the number of deaths will outweigh that of births, in which case it can
consequently
lead to the extinction of human species. While the chance of this happening is slim to none, the potential impact of this should never
be overlooked
.

To sum up,
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having
considered both sides, I am
firmly
convinced that the benefits of
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having
a
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small
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family
outweigh the potential drawbacks associated with it.
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a
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small
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family
ensures that parents can worry less about their financial
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circumstances and
they can
actively
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get
involved in their
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kid’s
holistic development.
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IELTS essay There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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