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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v.19

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 19
Although interpersonal skills are one of the most indispensable qualities for employability in our contemporary society, many employers have observed that their newly hired employees mostly fail to comply with this standard. The lack of communication skills in the workforce could have unimaginable damages, disrupting the function of companies, corporations or organizations. In this essay, I will discuss the most serious causes and offer some measures to tackle this problem. From an overall perspective, there are two ramifications that cause social communication inexperience in new employees. First of all, while soft skills, namely, a combination of certain qualities to help people work well with each other in the workplace, such as teamwork skills or communication abilities, are increasingly sought out by modern industries, the education system is more inclined to provide theoretical or technical subjects for students rather than create programs to help cultivate social skills. As a result, after graduating from schools or universities, young people are more likely to fail to accomplish certain tasks where they have to deal with their co-workers in companies. Secondly, parenting also plays an important role in the lack of interpersonal skills of modern workers. Sociological studies have shown that many parents force their children to focus on having good grades in school to have a perfect academic profile, rather than allowing them to develop their social skills. This trend, on the one hand, encourages people to improve their hard skills or technical skills, but on the other hand, it also puts the soft skills on the back burner. A study has predicted that over half a million people will be held back from job sectors by 2020 due to a lack of soft skills and also bring serious damages to the economic system itself. In order to deal with the aforementioned problems, the school system should step in to adopt more curricula that can teach students interpersonal skills such as communication, flexibility, critical thinking, or leadership in classrooms to prepare them for the future ahead. Furthermore, this problem also needs the participation of local industries to provide opportunities for young people, especially teenagers, to gain experience through engaging in the real-life workplace. Once students are well-equipped with soft skills through many training programs, the lack of fundamental social skills in new hires will be solved. In conclusion, it must be said that the inability of new hires to work functionally and socially in modern industries is a contentious topic with no easy solutions. However, in my mind, the best solution would be to develop intern programs to teach young people social skills in university, high school, or even secondary school. It is not unrealistic to expect that this measure will pave the way for the increase in the amount of better-prepared employees in the impending future.
Although interpersonal
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are one of the most indispensable qualities for employability in our contemporary society,
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many
employers have observed that their
newly
hired employees
mostly
fail to comply with this standard. The
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lack
of
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communication
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skills
in the workforce could have unimaginable damages, disrupting the function of
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companies
, corporations or organizations. In this essay, I will discuss the most serious causes and offer
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some
measures to tackle this problem.

From an
overall
perspective, there are two ramifications that cause
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social
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communication
inexperience in new employees.
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, while
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soft
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skills
,
namely
, a combination of certain qualities to
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help
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people
work well with each other in the workplace, such as teamwork
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skills
or
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communication
abilities, are
increasingly
sought out by modern industries, the education system is more inclined to provide theoretical or technical subjects for students
rather
than create programs to
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help
cultivate
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social
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skills
.
As a result
, after graduating from
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schools
or universities, young
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people
are more likely to fail to accomplish certain tasks where they
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have to
deal with their co-workers in
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companies
.
Secondly
, parenting
also
plays an
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important
role in the
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lack
of interpersonal
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skills
of modern workers. Sociological studies have shown that
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many
parents force their children to focus on having
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good
grades in
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school
to have a perfect academic profile,
rather
than allowing them to develop their
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social
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skills
. This trend, on the one hand, encourages
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people
to
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improve
their
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hard
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skills
or technical
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skills
,
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but
on the other hand
, it
also
puts the
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soft
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skills
on the back burner. A study has predicted that over half a million
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people
will
be held
back from job sectors by 2020 due to a
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lack
of
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soft
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skills
and
also
bring serious damages to the economic system itself.

In order to deal with the aforementioned problems, the
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school
system should step in to adopt more curricula that can teach students interpersonal
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skills
such as
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communication
, flexibility, critical thinking, or leadership in classrooms to prepare them for the future ahead.
Furthermore
, this problem
also
needs the participation of local industries to provide opportunities for young
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people
,
especially
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teenagers
, to gain experience through engaging in the real-life workplace. Once students are well-equipped with
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soft
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skills
through
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many
training programs, the
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lack
of fundamental
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social
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skills
in new hires will
be solved
.

In conclusion
, it
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must
be said
that the inability of new hires to work
functionally
and
socially
in modern industries is a contentious topic with no easy solutions.
However
, in my mind, the best solution would be to develop intern programs to teach young
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people
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social
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skills
in university, high
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school
, or even secondary
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school
. It is not unrealistic to
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expect
that this measure will pave the way for the increase in the amount of better-prepared employees in the impending future.
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IELTS essay There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
464 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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