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There are several number of industries which constitutes a government Although the authority infers economic progression is the vital aspect of the path to development some people believe that there are other progresses which should be in same position wi v.1

There are several number of industries which constitutes a government Although the authority infers economic progression is the vital aspect of the path to development some people believe that there are other progresses which should be in same position wi v. 1
People have different perspectives about sports, which is regarded as competitive. While it is thought by some people that competitive sports are beneficial to the country and its people, others say that these sports only create issues and tensions between the residents of a country as well as other nations. In my opinion, competitive sports bring many benefits to a country and different groups of people. On the one hand, some people contemplate that competitive sports such a racing, cricket, football, badminton, tennis, etc have a plethora of advantages for the public of a nation, and I agree. The main reason is that a country gets recognition or popularity when its players participate in the international competitive sports. In other words, these sports are often broadcasted in the media, so people from around the world know about the participating country. For example, some people know the name of the country ‘Brazil’ only because of its outstanding performance in the football game. Moreover, when international competition happens, players of different countries share their own country’s cultures, traditions, and views. This helps to create strong bonding between countries and players. On the other hand, it is often believed that competitive sports create only problems between people. The reason behind this thinking is that some people are involved in fighting or gambling for those sports. For instance, during the football world cup 2012, one Mexico supporter killed a Germany supporter in Bangladesh because Germany won the game and that Mexico supporter did not accept the result of that match. Sometimes fans of competitive sports become crazy and they often commit some offensive activities, which are not legally accepted. Therefore, some people are always against competitive sports. In conclusion, even though people may vary in their opinion, I believe that competitive sports are a blessing for a country and its citizens because these sports give us recognition and popularity.
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of its outstanding performance in the football game.
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Germany won the game and that Mexico supporter did not accept the result of that match.
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In conclusion
,
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give us recognition and popularity.
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IELTS essay There are several number of industries which constitutes a government Although the authority infers economic progression is the vital aspect of the path to development some people believe that there are other progresses which should be in same position wi v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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