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he chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

he chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
In today’s global society, researching the ancestral past of the family is becoming famous. Individuals wanted to do this in-order to know the inheritance of one’s own self. In my opinion, researching and knowing about one’s own common trends with respect to ancient background has a positive outcome. To begin with, searching out one’s own ancestral background will help to realize the skills, which is imported from our ancestors. These skills can be utilized for growth in professional as well as personal life. Additionally, these skills are hereditary, it can be interesting for people to know who all carrying these similar skill gets from previous generations. Moreover, the most popular reason to find out about family history is often due to the curiosity of learning own’s origin. This is because of the reason that, due to some families migrated abroad in order to reach good life, resulted in them losing their original culture and inherited the culture of the country they moved in. This also holds people to learn the culture of their origin and the family background. On the other hand, this is an advantageous trend of researching about the family background, which can also give confidence to the people with their history. There are individuals who lack self-confidence, by knowing the ancestors skill, these citizens will regain the confidence in them. For instance, people who are singers or orators, tends to get these skills from their past generation. To summarise, learning about one’s own geographical origin and skills are beneficial for the citizens from which they are originated. This can also be fruitful in growing with future prospective.
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family
is becoming
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. Individuals wanted to do this in-order to know the inheritance of one’s
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self. In my opinion, researching and knowing about one’s
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common trends with respect to ancient background has a
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positive
outcome.

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with, searching out one’s
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ancestral background will
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help
to realize the
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skills
, which
is imported
from our ancestors. These
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skills
can
be utilized
for growth in professional
as well
as personal life.
Additionally
, these
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skills
are hereditary, it can be interesting for
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people
to know who all carrying these similar
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skill
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gets
from previous generations.

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, the most popular reason to find out about
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history is
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due to the curiosity of learning
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origin. This is
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of the reason that, due to
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some
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families
migrated abroad in order to reach
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good
life, resulted in them losing their original culture and inherited the culture of the country they
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in. This
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to learn the culture of their origin and the
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background.

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, this is an advantageous trend of researching about the
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background, which can
also
give confidence to the
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people
with their history. There are individuals who lack self-confidence, by knowing the
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ancestors
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, these citizens will regain the confidence in them.
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,
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people
who are singers or orators, tends to
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from their past generation.

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, learning about one’s
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geographical origin and
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are beneficial for the citizens from which they
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. This can
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be fruitful in growing with future prospective.
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IELTS essay he chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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