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There are fewer controls over the designs and construction of home and office buildings. So, people can build them however they like. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

There are fewer controls over the designs and construction of home and office buildings. So, people can build them however they like. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
It is true that city’s administrations have lack of control over real estate development. Therefore, citizens are able to construct in any style they wish. This tendency has positive as well as negative consequences. To begin with, the opportunity to make a decision about concept of a future building without strict supervision is beneficial in terms of creativity and freedom. Especially, as a person who is doing the project of a house is creative and innovative, it can bring a special charm to a city. For instance, Paris became well known for the Eifel’s tower, even though it cannot be seen as suitable for the general plan of a city. As well as this, there are more examples in history when a construction became city’s card because of its unusual appearance. If development of an area were controlled, this unique architecture would never see a light. However, strict regulation of house building can be profitable in terms of convenience and comfort. In some cities, such as planned cities due to Garden city concept, a person constructing a house should not build more than 3-4 storey building as well as cutting surrounding trees is forbidden. Thus, it is fair if someone wants to live in the area should obey its rules. Due to compliance with construction regulations, there are absolutely friendly, safe and lovely cities around the world. Personally, I always dreamed to live in this kind of a city, they are charming. In conclusion, controlling of a house building has both merits and demerits. In my opinion, whole development of any city should be planned by authorities, but for the people should be left room for the creativity.
It is true that city’s administrations have lack of control over real estate development.
Therefore
, citizens are able to construct in any style they wish. This tendency has
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with, the opportunity to
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a decision about concept of a future
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building
without strict supervision is beneficial in terms of creativity and freedom.
Especially
, as a person who is doing the project of a
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house
is creative and innovative, it can bring a special charm to a city.
For instance
, Paris became
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well
known for the
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Eifel
’s tower,
even though
it cannot be
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seen
as suitable for the general plan of a city. As
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well
as this, there are more examples in history when a construction became city’s card
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because
of its unusual appearance. If development of an area
were controlled
, this unique architecture would never
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see
a light.

However
, strict regulation of
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house
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building
can be profitable in terms of convenience and comfort. In
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some
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cities
, such as planned
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cities
due to
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Garden city
concept, a person constructing a
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house
should not build more than 3-4
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storey
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building
as
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well
as cutting surrounding trees
is forbidden
.
Thus
, it is
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fair
if someone wants to
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live
in the area should obey its
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rules
. Due to compliance with construction regulations, there are
absolutely
friendly, safe and lovely
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cities
around the world.
Personally
, I always dreamed to
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live
in this
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kind of a
city, they are charming.

In conclusion
, controlling of a
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house
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building
has both merits and demerits. In my opinion, whole development of any city should
be planned
by authorities,
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but
for the
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people
should be
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left
room for the creativity.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There are fewer controls over the designs and construction of home and office buildings. So, people can build them however they like. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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