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Some cities have few controls over the design and construction of housing and office buildings. People think that they should be free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Some cities have few controls over the design and construction of housing and office buildings. People think that they should be free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
It is true that in some cities, the residents do have the freedom to design their homes or office buildings in their own way because there are limited government regulations on how it should be done. Although some clear benefits of such a trend can be seen, they are, in my view, eclipsed by the considerable drawbacks. On the one hand, there are many benefits of having less oversight on building design. The first advantage is that it gives scope for creativity. This allows designers or house owners to be more open to new ideas and to freely experiment with new materials and designs, which may eventually lead to the arrival of more innovative and unique buildings. Secondly, the freedom of construction design gives owners an opportunity to fulfil their personal preferences which may vary significantly from person to person. While some may be passionate about a traditional design, others might enjoy a more modern perspective. A building should not be considered a mere shelter but a place where its owner feels a sense of satisfaction and contentment as well. As such, in such circumstances, a loose regulation on the design and construction of buildings is obviously advantageous. On the other hand, I believe that the disadvantages of this trend are more significant. Firstly, houses and other buildings which are built without any strict or uniform building codes may be vulnerable to serious damage, especially due to natural disasters. A typical example of this are houses in parts of central Vietnam, where there are few regulations from the government on their construction. Due to this lack of government control, whenever a fierce storm strikes the region, thousands of houses lose their roofs, and even worse, are sometimes completely collapsed, leading to both losses of lives and property. Secondly, without strict control on building design, the uniformity of a city can be distorted. This may, in turn, damage the look of the city since the consistency in building design is often accompanied by beauty. In conclusion, although there are many positive effects of allowing people to freely design their homes or other buildings, it seems to me that these advantages are overshadowed by the drawbacks.
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cities, the residents do have the freedom to
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design
their homes or office
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buildings
in their
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own
way
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because
there
are limited
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government
regulations on how it should
be done
. Although
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clear
benefits of such a trend can be
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seen
, they are, in my view, eclipsed by the considerable drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are
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many
benefits of having less oversight on
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building
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design
. The
first
advantage is that it gives scope for creativity. This
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allows
designers or
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house
owners to be more open to new
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ideas
and to
freely
experiment with new materials and
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designs
, which may
eventually
lead to the arrival of more innovative and unique
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buildings
.
Secondly
, the freedom of construction
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design
gives owners an opportunity to fulfil their personal preferences which may vary
significantly
from person to person. While
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some
may be passionate about a traditional
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design
, others might enjoy a more modern perspective. A
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building
should not
be considered
a mere shelter
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but
a place where its owner feels a sense of satisfaction and contentment
as well
. As such, in such circumstances, a loose regulation on the
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design
and construction of
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buildings
is
obviously
advantageous.

On the
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other
hand, I believe that the disadvantages of this trend are more significant.
Firstly
,
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houses
and
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other
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buildings
which
are built
without any strict or uniform
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building
codes may be vulnerable to serious damage,
especially
due to natural disasters. A typical example of this are
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houses
in parts of central Vietnam, where there are few regulations from the
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government
on their construction. Due to this lack of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
control, whenever a fierce storm strikes the region, thousands of
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houses
lose their roofs, and even worse, are
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sometimes
completely collapsed, leading to both losses of
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lives
and property.
Secondly
, without strict control on
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building
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design
, the uniformity of a city can
be distorted
. This may, in turn, damage the look of the city since the consistency in
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building
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design
is
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often
accompanied by beauty.

In conclusion
, although there are
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many
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positive
effects of allowing
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people
to
freely
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design
their homes or
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other
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buildings
, it seems to me that these advantages
are overshadowed
by the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Some cities have few controls over the design and construction of housing and office buildings. People think that they should be free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

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4 paragraphs
364 words
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