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Some people encourage Development of factory farming and the scientific creation of fruits and vegetables in agriculture, but others oppose these developments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people encourage Development of factory farming and the scientific creation of fruits and vegetables in agriculture, but others oppose these developments. v. 2
With the help of advance scientific development in the sphere of agriculture, it is possible to farm in factories rather than organically. Some support this view, whilst others have the opposite opinion on this notion. This essay agrees that growing sustenance in-house is beneficial to the people and this is a positive trend that looks set to continue. Nevertheless, this essay will discuss both sides of views. On the one hand, factions of people cite that the farming artificially will have an adverse effect on humans. As the food grown in factories will never see sunlight which is the main source, it will be grown under helium-- a light which is a substitute. And hence, the natural substance of vitamins and minerals that are in organic will not be available in this artificial food. However, with the growth of technology, this issue can be diminished and can improve the nutrition in food. On the other hand, the perception of a group is that artificial farming is the best solution for plaguing evil: Hunger deaths. Almost 33% of the world is facing this devastating issue. With the increasing scientific discoveries in farming, we can grow food irrespective of season and location. It has been exemplified in times that the experts who are living in Antarctica have an in-house farm of paddy. I believe that this phenomenon will be the sole solution for the people who are suffering from poverty and hence it will have a positive impact on humans In conclusion, the science provides us the opportunity to use the environment to our benefit; while some believe that organic farming is not healthy, it will be completely foolish not to recognize the benefit of factory farming.
With the
help
of advance scientific development in the sphere of agriculture, it is possible to farm in factories
rather
than
organically
.
Some
support this view, whilst others have the opposite opinion on this notion. This essay
agrees
that growing sustenance in-
house
is beneficial to the
people
and this is a
positive
trend that looks set to continue.
Nevertheless
, this essay will discuss both sides of views.

On the one hand, factions of
people
cite that the
farming
artificially
will have an adverse effect on humans. As the food grown in factories will never
see
sunlight which is the main source, it will
be grown
under helium-- a light which is a substitute. And
hence
, the natural substance of vitamins and minerals that are in organic will not be available in this artificial food.
However
, with the growth of technology, this issue can
be diminished
and can
improve
the nutrition in food.

On the other hand
, the perception of a group is that artificial
farming
is the best solution for plaguing evil: Hunger deaths. Almost 33% of the world is facing this devastating issue. With the increasing scientific discoveries in
farming
, we can grow food irrespective of season and location. It has
been exemplified
in times that the experts who are living in Antarctica have an in-
house
farm of paddy. I believe that this phenomenon will be the sole solution for the
people
who are suffering from poverty and
hence
it will have a
positive
impact on
humans


In conclusion
, the science provides us the opportunity to
use
the environment to our benefit; while
some
believe that organic
farming
is not healthy, it will be completely foolish not to recognize the benefit of factory
farming
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people encourage Development of factory farming and the scientific creation of fruits and vegetables in agriculture, but others oppose these developments. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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