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Some cities have few controls over design and construction on housing and office building. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages? v.1

Some cities have few controls over design and construction on housing and office building. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages? v. 1
In these days, the design in the building has aroused people’s discussion. While some areas have fewer controls on housing and office building, people have more freedom in decorating their spaces. My belief is that that the positive aspects of this matter overlooked its drawbacks. To begin with. this trend of freedom in housing designs might certainly exert some detrimental to some specific historical values. First, the uniformity of a city can be distorted. This means there are some places where building designs serve particular purposes, for example, to show the local area’s cultural and historical values. If people here are allowed to freely build houses that do not follow the established guidelines, the aesthetic values will be compromised. For instance, contemporary buildings are not permitted to remain an example of a South-East Asian trading port dating from the 15th to the 19th century and has become a UNESCO World Heritage Site. There are, on the other hand, some dazing advantages that can easily overshadow the disadvantages of this matter. The benefit is that it gives scope for creativity which allows designers or house owners to be more open to new ideas and to freely experiment with new materials and designs. However, it may cause some boredom when all houses look alike. The diversity in house design, such as the combination of classical and state-of-the-art as well as unique constructions, enriches social life. Moreover, a building should not be considered mere contentment as well. In such circumstances, a loose regulation on the design and construction of the building is obviously beneficial. In conclusion, although this trend of freedom in construction is not without demerits the upsides will justify these.
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design
in the
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has aroused
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’s discussion. While
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some
areas have fewer controls on housing and office
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building
,
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people
have more freedom in decorating their spaces. My belief is
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positive
aspects of this matter overlooked its drawbacks.

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designs
might
certainly
exert
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detrimental to
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some
specific historical values.
First
, the uniformity of a city can
be distorted
. This means there are
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some
places where
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building
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designs
serve particular purposes,
for example
, to
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show
the local area’s cultural and historical values. If
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people
here are
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allowed
to
freely
build
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houses
that do not follow the established guidelines, the aesthetic values will
be compromised
.
For instance
, contemporary
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buildings
are not permitted to remain an example of a South-East Asian trading port dating from the 15th to the 19th century and has become a UNESCO World Heritage Site.

There are,
on the other hand
,
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some
dazing advantages that can
easily
overshadow the disadvantages of this matter. The benefit is that it gives scope for creativity which
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allows
designers or
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house
owners to be more open to new
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ideas
and to
freely
experiment with new materials and
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designs
.
However
, it may cause
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some
boredom when all
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houses
look alike. The diversity in
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house
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design
, such as the combination of classical and state-of-the-art
as well
as unique constructions, enriches social life.
Moreover
, a
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building
should not
be considered
mere contentment
as well
. In such circumstances, a loose regulation on the
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design
and construction of the
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building
is
obviously
beneficial.

In conclusion
, although this trend of freedom in construction is not without demerits the upsides will justify these.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some cities have few controls over design and construction on housing and office building. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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