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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advanta v.6

In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advanta v. 6
There is a trend that some city councils establish rules for the major design of certain streets and any constructor should follow them. Meanwhile, many cities still do not regulate it and everyone can build in any style they want. I think that both sides have their merits and in this essay, I am going to discuss pros and cos of it. On the one hand, stay those who believe that city image should be establish by architectural authorities. This idea may be supported by the fact that a modern city has to have unique spirit as well as to be functional and comfortable for his citizens. In addition, if everyone use their own design, it will lead to dissonant in styles of buildings and charming of a city will be lost. For example, some old cities such as Prague are appealing because they have an authentic image and the spirit of ancient Europe. However, letting people to choose the style of their dwelling have some benefits as well. If authorities let a constructor to decide which kind of a design to use, people will definitely come up with fresh ideas and it will probably change whole concept of a city. I consider it is highly beneficial because our society feels urgent demand in a new city where people and the nature will live in a peace. In order to conceive the environment, we need to change our way of life including our houses. To illustrate, concept of a green city with plants embedded into buildings cannot co-exist with idea having a traditional houses. In conclusion, having consider both side of the argument I think that both side have their merits. However, advantage of having possibility to build house by themselves outweigh disadvantage of it. To keep both sides satisfied, it is suggested to put in place appropriate regulations in order to preserve historical part of a town and to let people to change the other part of it.
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rules
for the major design of certain streets and any constructor should follow them. Meanwhile,
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cities
still
do not regulate it and everyone can build in any style they want. I
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think
that both
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sides
have their merits and in this essay, I am going to discuss pros and cos of it.

On the one hand, stay those who believe that city image should be
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establish
by architectural authorities. This
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idea
may
be supported
by the fact that a modern city
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has to
have unique spirit
as well
as to be functional and comfortable for his citizens.
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use
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design, it will lead to dissonant in styles of buildings and charming of a city will
be lost
.
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,
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some
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old
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cities
such as Prague are appealing
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because
they have an authentic image and the spirit of ancient Europe.

However
, letting
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people
to choose the style of their dwelling have
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some
benefits
as well
. If authorities
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let
a constructor to decide which
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kind of a
design to
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,
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people
will definitely
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up with fresh
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ideas
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change
whole concept of a city. I consider it is
highly
beneficial
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because
our society feels urgent demand in a new city where
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people
and the nature will
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live
in a peace. In order to conceive the environment, we need to
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change
our way of life including our
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houses
. To illustrate, concept of a green city with plants embedded into buildings cannot co-exist with
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idea
having a traditional
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houses
.

In conclusion
, having consider both side of the argument I
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think
that both side have their merits.
However
, advantage of having possibility to build
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house
by themselves outweigh disadvantage of it. To
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keep
both
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sides
satisfied, it
is suggested
to put in place appropriate regulations in order to preserve historical part of a town and to
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let
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people
to
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change
the other part of it.
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IELTS essay In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advanta v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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