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There are diferent kinds of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard these days? v.1

There are diferent kinds of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard these days? v. 1
Music has always played an important part in our lives. It has even shaped the way we look at the world and people around us. Every song we listen to triggers a certain kind of emotion. It may be the lyrics or the tune or the voice and the tone of the person singing it. Some people find their own identity through music. They write lyrics and albums to cater to a certain kind of feeling or phases in life. Lately, we have seen a shift. A lot of people give more preference to listening to music not native to their culture but from other cultures. In this essay, we will debate on why this is the case. Music has always had a lot of benefits. We hear music in some or the other form from the time we were born. A Mother puts her child to sleep by singing a lullaby. A kid is taught how to sing nursery rhymes in school. We also tend to learn things faster if we remember it as a song, and it has already been proven by studies that reading something with a melody helps boost memory. With so many songs coming out each day, there is always a song which caters to all kinds of audiences. There is music which can soothe us and put us to sleep, or a song which can motivate us to work harder in life. In short, Music is essential for living. Recently there has been a trend where we are swaying away from listening to our own songs, and listening to more international music. I think this has more to do with the quality. Today's traditional music has been commercialized to cater to a very casual audience. The lyrics of songs today do not have a lasting impact on someone. With all the interactions I have had with people, a lot of them remember songs which made them feel a certain way. Those were not songs which were made in our country but made internationally. This was the case mostly because it probably had a story behind how that song was really akin to them at a certain point in their life. There is also the fact that their tastes in the music has opened doors to find out more about the cultures and traditions in that country, which made them more open minded. In conclusion, I think listening to international music is important. In fact, I think it is more important because I feel the quality is a notch above what is produced traditionally today, coupled with the fact that it opens our minds to different culture and tradition. But that is not to say we ignore everything about our songs. There are certain diamonds in the rough which we might find and hold close to our hearts. Music connects people in really amazing ways and that is true, be it traditional or international.
Music
has always played an
important
part in our
lives
. It has even shaped the way we look at the world and
people
around us. Every song we listen to triggers a
certain
kind of emotion. It may be the lyrics or the tune or the voice and the tone of the person singing it.
Some
people
find their
own
identity through
music
. They write lyrics and albums to cater to a
certain
kind of feeling or phases in life. Lately, we have
seen
a shift.
A lot of
people
give more preference to listening to
music
not native to their
culture
but
from other
cultures
. In this essay, we will debate on why this is the case.

Music has always had
a lot of
benefits. We hear
music
in
some
or the other form from the time we
were born
. A Mother puts her child to sleep by singing a lullaby. A kid
is taught
how to sing nursery rhymes in school. We
also
tend to learn things faster if we remember it as a song, and it has already
been proven
by studies that reading something with a melody
helps
boost memory. With
so
many
songs coming out each day, there is always a song which caters to all kinds of audiences. There is
music
which can soothe us and put us to sleep, or a song which can motivate us to work harder in life. In short,
Music
is essential for living.

Recently there has been a trend where we are swaying away from listening to our
own
songs, and listening to more international
music
. I
think
this has more to do with the quality.
Today
's traditional
music
has
been commercialized
to cater to a
very
casual audience. The lyrics of songs
today
do not have a lasting impact on someone. With all the interactions I have had with
people
,
a lot of
them remember songs which made them feel a
certain
way. Those were not songs which
were made
in our country
but
made
internationally
. This was the case
mostly
because
it
probably
had a story behind how that song was
really
akin to them at a
certain
point in their life. There is
also
the fact that their tastes in the
music
has opened doors to find out more about the
cultures
and traditions in that country, which made them more
open minded
.

In conclusion
, I
think
listening to international
music
is
important
. In fact, I
think
it is more
important
because
I feel the quality is a notch above what
is produced
traditionally
today
, coupled with the fact that it opens our minds to
different
culture
and tradition.
But
that is
not to say we
ignore
everything about our songs. There are
certain
diamonds in the rough which we might find and hold close to our hearts.
Music
connects
people
in
really
amazing ways and
that is
true, be it traditional or international.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay There are diferent kinds of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard these days? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
489 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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