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Some people think that the effective way to reduce pollution is to tax the companies which cause it. Others think that there are better ways to achieve this. Discuss both the sides and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that the effective way to reduce pollution is to tax the companies which cause it. Others think that there are better ways to achieve this. v. 1
Pollution in almost all parts of the world has become a menace to humans and various solutions have been proposed to overcome it. While some people suggest taxing the corporates since they generate pollution while producing goods, others think that measures such as public awareness and regulation are more effective. I agree with the latter view. Imposing heavy taxes on companies is an efficient way to reduce as well as control air, water and ground pollution. Governments can use these taxes to create a fund that helps implement pollution control measures such as effluent treatment plants. Moreover, taxes will increase the price of goods in the market which will reduce the consumption and hence pollution. For example, the government of Singapore has imposed heavy taxes on all manufacturing facilities and used these funds to clean rivers, install machines to absorb harmful gases in Singapore’s air. Thus a heavy tax on companies has played an important role in making Singapore a clean place to live. On the other hand, some people suggest that taxes are not an effective way to reduce pollution and stringent pollution regulation and public awareness are more important. Strong oversight of environmentally hazardous industries such as paper and plastic by regulators will be an effective step in controlling pollution. Moreover, if people are aware of environmental impacts of products through measurements such as ecological footprint, they will purchase products that are less polluting. In conclusion, I believe that heavy tax on companies is not an effective way to reduce pollution since it translates to increase in prices of goods which eventually harm the consumers. Governments should strictly regulate the polluting industries and make public aware of pollution emitted by any product. This will not only make people more aware of their duty to protect their environment, but also make Earth a sustainable place to live.
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been proposed
to overcome it. While
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people
suggest taxing the
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corporates
since they generate
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pollution
while producing
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goods
, others
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think
that measures such as public awareness and regulation are more
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effective
. I
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agree
with the latter view.

Imposing
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taxes
on
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companies
is an efficient way to
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reduce
as well
as control air, water and ground
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pollution
.
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Governments
can
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use
these
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taxes
to create a fund that
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helps
implement
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pollution
control measures such as effluent treatment plants.
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,
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taxes
will increase the price of
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goods
in the market which will
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reduce
the consumption and
hence
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pollution
.
For example
, the
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government
of Singapore has imposed
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heavy
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taxes
on all manufacturing facilities and
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used
these funds to clean rivers, install machines to absorb harmful gases in Singapore’s air.
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companies
has played an
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important
role in making Singapore a clean place to
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live
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On the other hand
,
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some
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people
suggest that
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taxes
are not an
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effective
way to
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reduce
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pollution
and stringent
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pollution
regulation and public awareness are more
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important
. Strong oversight of
environmentally
hazardous industries such as paper and plastic by regulators will be an
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effective
step in controlling
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pollution
.
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, if
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people
are aware of environmental impacts of products through measurements such as ecological footprint, they will
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purchase
products that are less polluting.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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on
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is not an
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way to
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reduce
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pollution
since it translates to increase in prices of
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goods
which
eventually
harm the consumers.
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Governments
should
strictly
regulate the polluting industries and
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make
public aware of
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pollution
emitted by any product. This will not
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only
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make
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people
more aware of their duty to protect their environment,
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also
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make
Earth a sustainable place to
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live
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the effective way to reduce pollution is to tax the companies which cause it. Others think that there are better ways to achieve this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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