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There are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyles. Discuss. v.2

There are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyles. Discuss. v. 2
Currently, there are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people' s lifestyle, that is, he solution to problems is hidden in our lifestyle and behavior. For example, when going to the store, a consumer can take a bag with him, do not throw away plastic bottles or insure that all lights are off. The ecological footprint is the result of the actions and lifestyle of people. For example, many people do not recycle waste, which causes accumulation of garbage. also, despite the fact that a lot of various economical light bulbs are available now, a lot of people still use ordinary ones that require more electricity. Another major factor in this phenomenon is overpopulation, that is, the more people, the more needs and resources are used. As a result of these actions, all natural sources are depleted and used simply. However, like all problems, this problem also has solutions. For example, to reduce the exhaust emissions into the atmosphere, you can shorten the period of use of cars. that is, one day of the week can be declared a non-car day, only public transports and bicycles can operate on these days, or switching to electric cars can be another solution. it’s also no secret that plastic bottles and silicone bags are among the products that slowly decompose. The rejection of such products would significantly improve the environment, and paper bags can be used instead. But it is worth noting that this solution leads to another problem-deforestation. Therefore, it would be appropriate to start recycling paper and use it as bags. In conclusion, I believe that most natural problems arise due to wrong lifestyle. Changing people' s lifestyle, behavior, aptitude and attitude can easily solve many environmental problems
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lifestyle
,
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solution
to
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problems
is hidden
in our
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lifestyle
and behavior.
For example
, when going to the store, a consumer can take a bag with him, do not throw away plastic bottles or
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insure
that all lights are off.

The ecological footprint is the result of the actions and
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lifestyle
of
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people
.
For example
,
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many
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people
do not recycle waste, which causes accumulation of garbage.
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also
, despite the fact that
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a lot of
various economical light bulbs are available
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now
,
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a lot of
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people
still
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ordinary ones that require more electricity. Another major factor in this phenomenon is overpopulation,
that is
, the more
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people
, the more needs and resources are
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used
.
As a result
of these actions, all natural sources
are depleted
and
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used
simply
.

However
, like all
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, this
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also
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.
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, to
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the exhaust emissions into the atmosphere, you can shorten the period of
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use
of cars.
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that
is, one day of the week can
be declared
a non-car day,
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only
public transports and bicycles can operate on these days, or switching to electric cars can be another
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solution
.
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it
’s
also
no secret that plastic bottles and silicone bags are among the products that
slowly
decompose. The rejection of such products would
significantly
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improve
the environment, and paper bags can be
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used
instead
.
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But
it is worth noting that this
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solution
leads to another problem-deforestation.
Therefore
, it would be appropriate to
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recycling paper and
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it as bags.

In conclusion
, I believe that most natural
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problems
arise due to
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wrong
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lifestyle
. Changing
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people&
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lifestyle
, behavior, aptitude and attitude can
easily
solve
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many
environmental
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problems
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay There are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyles. Discuss. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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