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There are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyles. Discuss. v.1

There are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyles. Discuss. v. 1
Beating children as a form of discipline is gaining popularity in the society. Corporal punishment is seen by some parents as the best way of enforcing discipline in their children. This essay will argue why smacking children is not an acceptable form of discipline. Some parents of the Christian faith, believed the proverbial saying in the holy book, that "spare the rod and spoil the ward". They believe that if they fail to spank their children when they do something wrong, the children will eventually become unruly. They justifiably do this because, children tend to grow up and believe their conduct are acceptable without some form of correction, when they are out of line. Parents also do this to instill fear in their children and also show that there are consequences for bad behaviour. For example, a parent may smack a child's on his hands for playing with sharp objects and he will always remember whenever he sees a sharp object. Despite the reasons given above on why parents smack their children, this is an unacceptable way of raising children. This abuse has left some children with permanent scars and in some cases even led to the death of the victims. For instance, parents who have temperament issues could in the course of smacking injure or even accidentally kill the child. A World Health Organisation's survey in 2018 showed that two million children are being maimed every year by their parents, either deliberately or by accident. There are other non-physical methods of reinforcing good behaviour in children, like going to sit in the naughty corner or by refusing to buy a child's favourite candy. In conclusion, this essay argued that smacking children is not a conduct that should be encouraged and is not the best method for reinforcing good behaviour.
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children
as a form of discipline is gaining popularity in the society. Corporal punishment is
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seen
by
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some
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parents
as the best way of enforcing discipline in their
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children
. This essay will argue why smacking
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children
is not an acceptable form of discipline.

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Some
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parents
of the Christian faith, believed the proverbial saying in the holy book, that
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spare the rod and spoil the ward
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. They believe that if they fail to spank their
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children
when they do something
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wrong
, the
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children
will
eventually
become
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do this
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because
,
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children
tend to grow up and believe their conduct are acceptable without
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form of correction, when they are out of line.
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also
do this to instill fear in their
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children
and
also
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show
that there are consequences for
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bad
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behaviour
.
For example
, a
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parent
may smack a child's on his hands for playing with sharp
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objects and
he will always remember whenever he
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sees
a sharp object.

Despite the reasons
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given
above on why
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parents
smack their
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children
, this is an unacceptable way of raising
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children
. This abuse has
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left
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some
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children
with permanent scars and in
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some
cases even led to the death of the victims.
For instance
,
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parents
who have temperament issues could in the course of smacking injure or even
accidentally
kill the child. A World Health
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Organisation
's survey in 2018
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showed
that two million
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children
are
being maimed
every year by their
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parents
, either
deliberately
or by accident. There are other non-physical methods of reinforcing
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good
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behaviour
in
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children
, like going to sit in the naughty corner or by refusing to
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buy
a child's
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favourite
candy.

In conclusion
, this essay argued that smacking
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children
is not a conduct that should
be encouraged
and is not the best method for reinforcing
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good
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behaviour
.
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IELTS essay There are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyles. Discuss. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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