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Currently, there are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyle, that is v.1

Currently, there are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyle, that is v. 1
In this present world, fast food consumption continues to rise, and this is causing people to suffer from various health problems such as diabetes, high cholesterol and cardiovascular diseases. It is believed by many people that governments should imply a tax on fast food products or increase the existing ones in order to prevent such diseases. In my opinion, it is the governments’ duty to protect its citizens from any kind of health problems. Thus, governments should increase the taxes on fast food products to protect its people while creating an income resource at the same time. First of all, it is widely known that a lot of people suffer from different kinds of health problems due to increasing numbers of fast food consumption. Increasing the taxes on fast food products combined with subsidising farmers to grow healthier consumption products like fruits and vegetables by lowering the taxes on seeds for example, can easily reduce the fast food consumption in a country, since it forces people to buy those healthier final goods rather than dangerous fast foods. As a result, we will end up in a society where its people are healthy individuals, despite the developments in the fast food market. Secondly, imposing higher taxes on fast food products is beneficial not only for the people, but also for the governments, as it creates a significant income resource for their budget. Moreover, authorities can use that money on their future investments such as developing existing public transportation or opening a state-owned factory. In fact, some studies have shown that governments which imposed higher taxes on fast food products, significantly increased their GDP – a measurement of economic growth – in the long-run. To sum up, fast food consumption increasing every single day. Many individuals believe that it is the governments’ duty to protect people from various health problems which caused by high consumption in fast food products. From my perspective, governments should imply higher taxes on those kinds of dangerous products, since it encourages people to become healthier individuals and creates an income resource for the authorities.
In this present world,
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consumption
continues to rise, and this is causing
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people
to suffer from various
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health
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problems
such as diabetes, high cholesterol and cardiovascular diseases. It
is believed
by
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many
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people
that
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governments
should imply a
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tax
on
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fast
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food
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products
or increase the existing ones in order to
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prevent
such diseases. In my opinion, it is the
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governments’
duty to protect its citizens from any kind of
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health
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problems
.
Thus
,
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governments
should increase the
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
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products
to protect its
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people
while creating an income resource at the same time.

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, it is
widely
known that
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a lot of
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people
suffer from
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different
kinds of
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health
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problems
due to increasing numbers of
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fast
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food
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consumption
. Increasing the
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
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products
combined with
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subsidising
farmers to grow healthier
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consumption
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products
like fruits and vegetables by lowering the
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taxes
on seeds
for example
, can
easily
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reduce
the
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fast
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food
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consumption
in a country, since it forces
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people
to
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buy
those healthier final
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goods
rather
than
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dangerous
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fast
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foods
.
As a result
, we will
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end
up in a society where its
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people
are healthy individuals, despite the developments in the
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fast
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food
market.

Secondly
, imposing higher
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
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products
is beneficial not
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only
for the
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people
,
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also
for the
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governments
, as it creates a significant income resource for their budget.
Moreover
, authorities can
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use
that money on their future investments such as developing existing public transportation or opening a state-
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owned
factory. In fact,
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some
studies have shown that
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governments
which imposed higher
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
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products
,
significantly
increased their GDP
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–
a measurement of economic growth
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–
in the long-run.

To sum up,
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fast
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consumption
increasing every single day.
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Many
individuals believe that it is the
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governments’
duty to protect
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people
from various
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health
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problems
which caused by high
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consumption
in
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fast
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food
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products
. From my perspective,
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governments
should imply higher
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taxes
on those kinds of
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dangerous
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products
, since it encourages
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people
to become healthier individuals and creates an income resource for the authorities.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Currently, there are a lot of environmental problems. Most of these problems arise due to people's lifestyle, that is v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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