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The world of work is forever changing at a fast pace. Working condition today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes ad give your suggestion for how people should prepare themselves for work in the future v.2

The world of work is forever changing at a fast pace. Working condition today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes ad give your suggestion for how people should prepare themselves for work in the future v. 2
As a result of rapid developments that are taking place in the employment sector, the current working scenario is altering and job-hopping is becoming more common. In this essay, the driving force of the changes and possible solutions to prepare for work in the time to come will be discussed. To embark upon, it is undeniable that money is always one of the main motives of people getting to more work. With globalization and emerging technology, life is getting more financially demanding. People need other jobs either to meet regular expenses or pay off debt or just want the extra income to buy a fancier car. Alongside the motive of getting more income, people also appear to be motivated to take another occupation mainly by the value of the second job itself rather than the money it brought in. These include people who take a second job to gain more experience, to find a more enjoyable and meaningful job, or to build a business so they could be self-employed in the future. So while doing the current work, they will also look for other possible opportunities they could occupy and see whether those are more profitable and highly rewarding as well as benefit them in some ways. Nowadays, it is noticeable that the new variation of working opportunities is evident, and certainly, skills with a combination of a set goal in mind and creative thinking are the main keys for future jobs. Conducting learning and training to gain more knowledge and skill is essential, but setting a goal is utmost. It is immensely crucial so they will not take the sidetrack or go in the wrong way. In setting a life goal, people should contemplate what they want to get in the future and who they want to be. To arrive at the set goal, people ought to also possess visionary ways of thinking. By thinking creatively, people will attempt to look for as many alternatives to deal with life demands. Further, creative thinking is highly encouraged if people want to be able to enjoy a desirable lifestyle. To put in a nutshell, change is the necessity of time, it could be economic demand, the enjoyment in working lots of jobs, or any other factors but creativity and goals setting is the utmost factors for future reference.
As a result
of rapid developments that are taking place in the employment sector, the
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current
working scenario is altering and job-hopping is becoming more common. In this essay, the driving force of the
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changes
and possible solutions to prepare for work in the time to
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come
will
be discussed
.

To embark upon, it is undeniable that money is always one of the main motives of
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people
getting to more work. With globalization and emerging technology, life is getting more
financially
demanding.
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People
need other
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jobs
either to
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meet
regular expenses or pay off debt or
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just
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want
the extra income to
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buy
a fancier car. Alongside the motive of getting more income,
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people
also
appear to
be motivated
to take another occupation
mainly
by the value of the second
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job
itself
rather
than the money it brought in. These include
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people
who take a second
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job
to gain more experience, to find a more enjoyable and meaningful
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job
, or to build a business
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so
they could be self-employed in the
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future
.
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So
while doing the
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current
work, they will
also
look for other possible opportunities they could occupy and
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see
whether those are more profitable and
highly
rewarding
as well
as benefit them in
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some
ways.

Nowadays, it is noticeable that the new variation of working opportunities is evident, and
certainly
,
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skills
with a combination of a set
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goal
in mind and creative
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thinking
are the main keys for
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future
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jobs
. Conducting learning and training
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to gain
more knowledge and
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skill
is essential,
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but
setting a
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goal
is utmost. It is
immensely
crucial
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so
they will not take the sidetrack or go in the
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wrong
way. In setting a life
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goal
,
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people
should contemplate what they
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want
to
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get
in the
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future
and who they
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want
to be. To arrive at the set
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goal
,
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people
ought to
also
possess visionary ways of
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thinking
. By
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thinking
creatively
,
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people
will attempt to look for as
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many
alternatives to deal with life demands.
Further
, creative
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thinking
is
highly
encouraged if
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people
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want
to be able to enjoy a desirable lifestyle.

To put in a nutshell,
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change
is the necessity of time, it could be economic demand, the enjoyment in working lots of
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jobs
, or any other factors
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but
creativity and
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goals
setting is the utmost factors for
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future
reference.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The world of work is forever changing at a fast pace. Working condition today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes ad give your suggestion for how people should prepare themselves for work in the future v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
387 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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