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The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work i v.2

The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work i v. 2
In recent decade, one of the major problems which our environment as well as the people suffers is the pollution. The reason is the increased use of fuel consuming vehicles such as cars, two-wheelers, etc. Even though a lot of steps taken in controlling the pollution, its influence is not considerably seen. Some of them think that increasing the charges of Petrol/Diesel has a chance to reduce the usage of cars. I totally disagree with the statement. Let me figure out the reasons in the remaining part of the essay. Firstly, In this mechanical life, where people are put under mental pressure are less likely to accept the physical stress caused due to travelling by government vehicles. Also, it takes a bit longer duration to reach their work sites. The condition of the fares in public vehicles is such that people don't feel any difference using their own vehicle or the common transportation. Secondly, the new generation people have a general mindset that going to a place in car will be a symbol of their pride and status. Having a private vehicle wherever we go, reduces the time we wait for a bus or booking a cab. For an instance, if the time taken to reach a place of 10km distance by bus is 1 hour, the duration to reach the same place by a car will be not more than 30 minutes. This will ultimately change people's preference in choosing their mode of transport irrespective of the cost. Also, fuel is used by all other vehicles such as trucks, lorries, which carry goods from one location to another. So appreciating the charges of petrol or diesel can have a severe effect resulting in the cost of goods. This can have a serious economic issues, wherein the demand for a product produced by the countryside people goes low. So, I would like to conclude by saying that increasing the charges of fuel will have only a less or no influence on the usage of a car or other modes of private transportation. So the government can implement some other rules to restrict or limit the usage of private vehicles instead of increasing the cost of fuel.
In recent decade, one of the major problems which our environment
as well
as the
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
suffers
is the pollution. The reason is the increased
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use
of
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fuel
consuming
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vehicles
such as
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cars
,
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two-wheelers
, etc.
Even though
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a lot of
steps taken in controlling the pollution, its influence is not
considerably
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seen
.
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Some
of them
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think
that increasing the charges of Petrol/Diesel has a chance to
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reduce
the usage of
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cars
. I
totally
disagree with the statement.
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Let
me figure out the reasons in the remaining part of the essay.

Firstly
, In this mechanical life, where
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people
are put
under mental pressure are less likely to accept the physical
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stress
caused due to travelling by
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government
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vehicles
.
Also
, it takes a bit longer duration to reach their work sites. The condition of the fares in public
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vehicles
is such that
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people
don't feel any difference using their
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own
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vehicle
or the common transportation.

Secondly
, the new generation
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people
have a general mindset that going to a place in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
will be a symbol of their pride and status. Having a private
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vehicle
wherever we go,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the time we wait for a bus or booking a cab. For an instance, if the time taken to reach a place of
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10km
distance by bus is 1 hour, the duration to reach the same place by a
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car
will be not more than 30 minutes. This will
ultimately
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change
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people
's preference in choosing their mode of transport irrespective of the cost.

Also
,
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fuel
is
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used
by all other
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vehicles
such as trucks, lorries, which carry
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goods
from one location to another.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
appreciating the charges of petrol or diesel can have a severe effect resulting in the cost of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
. This can have a serious economic issues, wherein the demand for a product produced by the countryside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
goes
low.

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So
, I would like
to conclude
by saying that increasing the charges of
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fuel
will have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a less or no influence on the usage of a
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car
or other modes of private transportation.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
the
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government
can implement
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some
other
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rules
to restrict or limit the usage of private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
instead
of increasing the cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work i v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
366 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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