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More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Working from home used to be considered incredibly uncommon. Employees spent their days in factories or offices, on building sites or farms. With the surge in popularity of the internet, seismic changes have taken place in work patterns. These days, administrators and professionals are often based in their own homes. This radical shift has had both positive and negative repercussions. Probably the most obvious benefits of working from home are flexibility, convenience and cost. To some extent, employees based in their own living-rooms can start and finish whenever it suits them. They can fit working hours around childcare, housework and other commitments. In addition, by not commuting, they save valuable time and avoid having to endure the stresses of traffic jams, road congestion, finding parking spaces, or using overcrowded train services. They cut costs as there is no need to pay parking charges or bus fares. However, although this arrangement might seem ideal, there are downsides. For many members of staff, the most enjoyable aspect of the work is the social interaction. The chance to gather with colleagues and gossip, joke or chat is a pleasurable element of the working lives of clerical staff, personal assistants and middle-managers. In addition, many working from home complain that their work-life balance is affected. They claim that it is difficult to switch off and wind down and that the barrier between working and relaxing becomes blurred and hazy. Overall, it is indisputable that working from home can be productive and satisfying. Nevertheless, anyone considering this option need to be aware of the potential pitfalls. It makes sense for businesses offering staff the chance to combine working at home and on the company’s premises. Many enlightened and forward-thinking firms have already put this policy into practice and I fervently hope that others will follow suit.
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from home
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used
to
be considered
incredibly
uncommon. Employees spent their days in factories or offices, on building sites or farms. With the surge in popularity of the internet, seismic
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changes
have taken place in work patterns. These days, administrators and professionals are
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often
based in their
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own
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homes
. This radical shift has had both
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positive
and
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negative
repercussions.

Probably
the most obvious benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
from home are flexibility, convenience and cost. To
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, employees based in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
living-rooms can
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start
and finish whenever it suits them. They can fit
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working
hours around childcare, housework and other commitments.
In addition
, by not commuting, they save valuable time and avoid having to endure the
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stresses
of traffic jams, road congestion, finding parking spaces, or using overcrowded train services. They
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cut
costs as there is no need to pay parking charges or bus fares.

However
, although this arrangement might seem ideal, there are downsides. For
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many
members of staff, the most enjoyable aspect of the work is the social interaction. The chance to gather with colleagues and gossip, joke or chat is a pleasurable element of the
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working
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lives
of clerical staff, personal assistants and middle-managers.
In addition
,
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many
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working
from home complain that their work-life balance is
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affected
. They claim that it is difficult to switch off and wind down and that the barrier between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
and relaxing becomes blurred and hazy.

Overall
, it is indisputable that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
from home can be productive and satisfying.
Nevertheless
, anyone considering this option need to be aware of the potential pitfalls. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
sense for businesses offering staff the chance to combine
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working
at home and on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
’s premises.
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Many
enlightened and forward-thinking firms have already put this policy into practice and I
fervently
hope that others will follow suit.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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