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Q 4 Social interactionPeople deal with each other every day. This interaction is at the heart of social life. The study of social interaction is concerned with the influence people have over one another’s behavior. People take each other into account in t v.1

Q 4 Social interactionPeople deal with each other every day. This interaction is at the heart of social life. The study of social interaction is concerned with the influence people have over one another’s behavior. People take each other into account in t v. 1
It is considered by many that, reducing the excess packaging is being the responsibility of the manufacturers and supermarkets. However, it is argued by some that, if customers start to stop buying excessively packaged goods, then the supermarket automatically starts to sell simple products. I would agree, it is the responsibility of the producers to sell their products by avoiding excess package. To begin with,  excessive packing is a market strategy to create a false impression in the minds of customers regarding product quality. So, it is the responsibility of the manufactures and supermarkets to prove that their superior quality products can be wrapped simply. For example, many branded biscuits are accommodated only fifty percent of the total package. Even if they avoid extra packages, they need not fear to lose their market because they already established in the market. Besides, this excess packaging certainly escalates the landfill and which is one of the major contributions to pollution. Therefore, both manufacturers and should pack in a simple way to avoid harm to the environment. On the other hand, some people believe that one of the ideal ways to stop extra packaging is done by customers who can refuse such items. Once the product sales go down,  the manufacturer will change the selling strategy which is based on the feedback. However, this is not often practical.  People could not refuse something essential for them such as rice or milk even if they are packed in a complicated way. Furthermore, people can not resist buying things with excessive packaging since they greatly influenced by advertisements. In conclusion, in my opinion, it is the responsibility of the producers and sellers to reduce the excess packaging to avoid possible side effects on the environment. Even though consumers can resist buying such items, it is not always done if we are really in demand.
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packaging
is being the
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responsibility
of the manufacturers and supermarkets.
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that, if customers
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automatically
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. I would
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agree
, it is the
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responsibility
of the producers to sell their
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products
by avoiding
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excess
package.

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begin
with,
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excessive packing is a market strategy to create a false impression in the minds of customers regarding
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product
quality.
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So
, it is the
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responsibility
of the manufactures and supermarkets to prove that their superior quality
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products
can
be wrapped
simply
.
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,
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branded biscuits
are accommodated
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fifty percent of the total package. Even if they avoid extra packages, they need not fear to lose their market
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because
they already established in the market.
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, this
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excess
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packaging
certainly
escalates the landfill and which is one of the major contributions to pollution.
Therefore
, both manufacturers and should pack
Consider replacing "in a simple way" with the adverb for "simple"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a simple way
 to avoid harm to the environment.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that one of the ideal ways to 
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stop
extra
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packaging
is done
by customers who can refuse such items. Once the
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product
sales go down,
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the manufacturer will
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change
the selling strategy which
is based
on the feedback.
However
, this is not
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often
practical.  
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People
could not refuse something essential for them such as rice or milk even if they
are packed
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in a complicated way
.
Furthermore
,
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people
can not resist buying things with excessive
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packaging
since they
greatly
influenced by advertisements.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, it is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsibility
of the producers and sellers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
excess
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packaging
to avoid possible side effects on the environment.
Even though
consumers can resist buying such items, it is not always done if we are
really
in demand.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay Q 4 Social interactionPeople deal with each other every day. This interaction is at the heart of social life. The study of social interaction is concerned with the influence people have over one another’s behavior. People take each other into account in t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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