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The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purpose around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flight should be texted more? v.1

The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purpose around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flight should be texted more? v. 1
It is irrefutable that, in this 21st century become a faster. Therefore, most of the people using the flight for a long journey. Such as, for a holiday, business trip and any household purposes around the world over present time. There are few merits and demerits about the airline. As well as, I believe that government should take more taxed as compared to a bus, a train and so on. I have given reason for these and relevant examples in following paragraph. To commence with, the flights after numerous advantage of us. Foremost, to take a less time as compared to the road transportation. For instance, cricket matches played always different ground. Therefore, cricket team travel in flight. Secondly, in a business person travel all over the globe, so, they are always persuading airline. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages about these. To begin with, jet airways produced noise and air pollution. To the next, middle class people not affordable, therefore, they are always prefer to land vehicle. Thirdly, most of the flight cancelled and delayed in winter and monsoon season. Such as, due to bad weather, high fog in atmosphere and so on. In my nation, above discussion cons are more than drawback. Flight taxed are more rather than road transportation. And it is indeed, because of more reliable, comfortable, facilities more provide. In conclusion, middle class family does not take flight, because, high cost of air tickets. But for a long traveller and business person always prefer flight
It is irrefutable that, in this 21st century become a faster.
Therefore
, most of the
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people
using the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flight
for a long journey. Such as, for a holiday, business trip and any household purposes around the world over present time. There are few merits and demerits about the airline.
As well
as, I believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take more taxed as compared to a bus, a train and
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so
on. I have
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given
reason for these and relevant examples in following paragraph.

To commence with, the
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flights
after numerous advantage of us. Foremost, to take a less time as compared to the road transportation.
For instance
, cricket matches
The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'played'.
played always
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different
ground.
Therefore
, cricket team travel in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flight
.
Secondly
, in a business person travel all over the globe,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, they are always persuading airline.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
disadvantages about these. To
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begin
with, jet airways produced noise and air pollution. To the
next
, middle
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class
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people
not affordable,
therefore
, they are always
Consider using a past participle here: "preferred".
prefer
to land vehicle.
Thirdly
, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flight
cancelled and delayed in winter and monsoon season. Such as, due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
weather, high fog in atmosphere and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

In my nation, above discussion cons are more than drawback.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Flight
taxed are more
rather
than road transportation. And it is
indeed
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of more reliable, comfortable, facilities more provide.

In conclusion
, middle
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class
family does not take
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flight
,
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because
, high cost of air tickets.
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But
for a long
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traveller
and business person always prefer
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flight
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purpose around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flight should be texted more? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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