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The world has been an enormous increase in flight for leisure business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights Do you think flights should be taxed more v.1

The world has been an enormous increase in flight for leisure business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights Do you think flights should be taxed more v. 1
Some people believe that building new railway line, bullet train and metro are mandatory whereas others opine that it is better to upgrade existing mass transport. However, In my opinion, I personally believe that maintaining the available means of transport is a better choice as it is less costly and more feasible. This essay intends to analyse both perspectives. On one hand, by creating new railway lines and metros will provide a more suitable and convenient solution to travel. In other words, new paths will emerge, modern trains will be faster and smoother, Eventually reducing gaps between the cities. For example, In the USA, it was found that due introduction of bullet trains, transit of people has risen significantly and more people are able to travel from place to place. Moreover, government metros are much cheaper than the regular means of shipment and Hence, people are able to save their money. On the other hand, improving existing means will also definitely help with the overall transition of people and it will be much cheaper than implementing trains. I mean, upgrading public transport will be instantly beneficial for the masses and thus it will be more effective. For instance, renovation of mass transport takes just 6 months while construction of new ways of transportation will take more time. further, the saved money can be used to provide subsidies for the people who travel frequently. To encapsulate, both ways have the same objective to improve productivity of the transport system. Introducing modern ways will provide fast and handy solutions while compromising the budgets, but, restoration of public transit will be cheaper and it will take less time to upgrade.
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Some
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people
believe that building
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new
railway line, bullet
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train
and metro are mandatory whereas others opine that it is better to upgrade existing mass
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transport
.
However
, In my opinion, I
personally
believe that maintaining the available
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means
of
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transport
is a better choice as it is less costly and more feasible. This essay intends to
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analyse
both perspectives.

On one hand, by creating
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new
railway lines and metros will provide a more suitable and convenient solution to travel.
In other words
,
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new
paths will emerge, modern
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trains
will be faster and smoother,

Eventually
reducing gaps between the cities.
For example
, In the USA, it
was found
that due introduction of bullet
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trains
, transit of
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people
has risen
significantly
and more
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people
are able to travel from place to place.
Moreover
,
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government
metros are much cheaper than the regular
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means
of shipment and
Hence
,
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people
are able to save their money.

On the other hand
, improving existing
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means
will
also
definitely
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help
with the
overall
transition of
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people
and it will be much cheaper than implementing
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trains
. I
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mean
, upgrading public
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transport
will be
instantly
beneficial for the masses and
thus
it will be more effective.
For instance
, renovation of mass
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transport
takes
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just
6 months while construction of
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new
ways of transportation will take more time.
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further
, the saved money can be
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used
to provide subsidies for the
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people
who travel
frequently
.

To encapsulate, both ways have the same objective to
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improve
productivity of the
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transport
system. Introducing modern ways will provide
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fast
and handy solutions while compromising the budgets,
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but
, restoration of public transit will be cheaper and it will take less time to upgrade.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The world has been an enormous increase in flight for leisure business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights Do you think flights should be taxed more v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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