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Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. v. 2
There is a school of thought that says renowned leaders have natural ability to lead while others take a contrarian view and believe that leading skills can be instilled. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the latter notion because this ability can be learnt by practical experiences. Many think that a leader is born with innate qualities of managing people because leadership is not taught in any educational institution. Guiding people is a vast and dynamic subject which cannot be covered in some textbooks. Moreover, the world has never seen any prominent leader who has gone to some institution to impart knowledge on leadership qualities. Subhash Chandra Bose for example, was a great Indian leader from his childhood days who led thousands of people with his natural leading capabilities. However, I feel that out of hundred, only few are this kind of born talented and hence it is necessary to learn leadership qualities in other ways. On the contrary, according to some and I believe too that leaders can inculcate the required skills by facing real life experiences. Pragmatic circumstances come with their own problems and challenges which need a certain mind-set to tackle. People who are exposed to this kind of scenarios not only learn problem solving skills but also turn out to be good leaders with huge followers. Take the life of Queen Elizabeth for instance, she wore the crown at a young age of 23, today she is one of the most powerful leaders on earth. She publicly credits her practical exposure for her leadership skills. Therefore, I believe any person with willingness to learn from life’s ups and downs has bright chances of becoming an eminent leader. In conclusion, although there are some people who advocate the importance of inherited leading skills since there are no schools for them to learn, I believe that exposing one to different realities of life teaches to be a front-runner.
There is a school of
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thought
that says renowned
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leaders
have natural ability to lead while others take a contrarian view and
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believe
that leading
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skills
can
be instilled
. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the latter notion
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because
this ability can be
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learnt
by practical experiences.

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think
that a
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leader
is born
with innate qualities of managing
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people
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because
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leadership
is not taught in any educational institution. Guiding
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people
is a vast and dynamic subject which cannot
be covered
in
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some
textbooks.
Moreover
, the world has never
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seen
any prominent
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leader
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who
has gone to
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some
institution to impart knowledge on
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leadership
qualities.
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Subhash
Chandra Bose
for example
, was a great Indian
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leader
from his childhood days
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who
led thousands of
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people
with his natural leading capabilities.
However
, I feel that out of hundred,
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only
few are this kind of born talented and
hence
it is necessary to
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learn
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leadership
qualities in other ways.

On the contrary
, according to
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some
and I
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believe
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too that
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leaders
can inculcate the required
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skills
by facing real
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life
experiences. Pragmatic circumstances
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come
with their
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own
problems and challenges which need a certain mind-set to tackle.
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People
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who
are exposed
to this kind of scenarios not
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only
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learn
problem solving
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skills
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but
also
turn out to be
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good
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leaders
with huge followers. Take the
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life
of Queen Elizabeth
for instance
, she wore the crown at a young age of 23,
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today
she is one of the most powerful
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leaders
on earth. She
publicly
credits her practical exposure for her
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leadership
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skills
.
Therefore
, I
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believe
any person with willingness to
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learn
from
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life’s
ups and downs has bright chances of becoming an eminent leader.

In conclusion
, although there are
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some
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people
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who
advocate the importance of inherited leading
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skills
since there are no schools for them to
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learn
, I
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believe
that exposing one to
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different
realities of
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life
teaches to be a front-runner.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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