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The world has been an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over the recent years. Why do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more? v.1

The world has been an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over the recent years. Why do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more? v. 1
In today’s era, the world has seen a significant incline in several flights for business, travel, and commercial. This trend brings a plethora of pros and cons to the residents around the globe. In this essay, I will expound on the advantages and disadvantages of using this mode of transportation before providing my opinion regarding if flights should be taxed or not. Those who see more advantages of using air transportation claim that it can save commute time for traveler and business. It stands to the fact that this mode of transportation is the fastest way to reach to any destination around the world. Thus, it saves a lot of time for passengers. Secondly, commercial companies can accelerate their production. For instance, multinational companies such as FedEx, Amazon, DHL and many more require instant transportation from different distribution branches around the world to satisfy the consumer needs. Hence, they solely rely on this medium. On the other hand, we must take a look at the negative aspect of pursing air transportation. In the past, there were many airplane crash accidents and hundreds, even thousands of people lost their life. This mode could put citizen’s life at great risk. We should take this concern very seriously, of course. Yet, we must remember that we cannot step back to use technology by thinking of losing the lives. If that was the case, we had lost many people’s lives in another mode of transportation, where we can take the example of the Titanic. As far as I am concerned, the government should not implement any new tax policies to limit the use of air transportation, because it will affect the economy of the country. If the cost of transportation increases, as an illustration, then prices of all the multinational and national products will spike as well. Hence, consumers will suffer. To sum up, air transportation brings many benefits for people and business including the reduction of travel time as well as allow companies to deliver and produce their products faster. As the government should not introduce any new law that could bounce the prices.
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today
’s era, the world has
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seen
a significant incline in several flights for business, travel, and commercial. This trend brings a plethora of pros and cons to the residents around the globe. In this essay, I will expound on the advantages and disadvantages of using this
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mode
of
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transportation
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before
providing my opinion regarding if flights should
be taxed
or not.

Those who
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see
more advantages of using
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air
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transportation
claim that it can save commute time for traveler and business. It stands to the fact that this
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mode
of
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transportation
is the fastest way to reach to any destination around the world.
Thus
, it saves
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a lot of
time for passengers.
Secondly
, commercial
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companies
can accelerate their production.
For instance
, multinational
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companies
such as FedEx, Amazon, DHL and
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many
more require instant
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transportation
from
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different
distribution branches around the world to satisfy the consumer needs.
Hence
, they
solely
rely on this medium.

On the other hand
, we
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must
take a look at the
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negative
aspect of pursing
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air
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transportation
. In the past, there were
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many
airplane crash accidents and hundreds, even thousands of
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people
lost their
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life
. This
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mode
could put citizen’s life at great
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risk
. We should take this concern
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very
seriously
,
of course
.
Yet
, we
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must
remember that we cannot step back to
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use
technology by thinking of losing the
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lives
. If that was the case, we had lost
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many
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people
’s
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lives
in another
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mode
of
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transportation
, where we can take the example of the Titanic.

As far as I
am concerned
, the
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government
should not implement any new tax policies to limit the
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use
of
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air
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transportation
,
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because
it will affect the economy of the country. If the cost of
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transportation
increases, as an illustration, then prices of all the multinational and national products will spike
as well
.
Hence
, consumers will suffer.

To sum up,
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air
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transportation
brings
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many
benefits for
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people
and business including the reduction of travel time
as well
as
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allow
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companies
to deliver and produce their products faster.
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As
the
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government
should not introduce any new law that could bounce the prices.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The world has been an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over the recent years. Why do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
351 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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