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The woman expresses her opinion of the legal aid project. States her opinion in favor of the project. v.1

The woman expresses her opinion of the legal aid project. States her opinion in favor of the project. v. 1
There are arousing opinion about countries should keep all their food products interstate and depend the least on imported products. While many countries want to reduce dependence on imported products to minimize and maximize exported goods, I completely oppose this statement, for it is impossible for a country to self-produce aliment for the whole population, and imported food is fundamental in contributing a well-rounded meal. First of all, it is virtually impossible to provide sufficient food for the whole population. Each country has different geographic and weather condition, hence, no nations are capable to produce adequate supplies. For example, some exotic fruit can only be grown in tropical region such as Vietnam, while most berries can only be found in temperate climate areas. Countries like Laos, for further instance, without sea border, will depend on exported sea products from other countries. Thanks to the act of importing food, people from different countries are able to enjoy different kinds of produce that are non-existent in their home countries. Secondly, minimizing the act of importing might lead to some serious diplomatic straits. By cutting down the throat of importing, one is also deteriorating its foreign trade link to other nations, losing potential overseas markets for exporting as well. Several cases of international commercial trade crisis have occurred for this possibility and caused certain economic despair in not just both countries but all over the globe. In conclusion, my firm conviction is that it is an unfeasible task for some countries to provide food for everyone, and food importation should be embraced, thanks to its contribution to the abundance and the variety of our daily meals, and for the sake of the international economy.
There are arousing opinion about
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should
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keep
all their
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food
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products
interstate and depend the least on imported
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products
. While
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many
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countries
want to
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reduce
dependence on imported
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products
to minimize and maximize exported
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goods
, I completely oppose this statement, for it is impossible for a
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country
to self-produce aliment for the whole population, and imported
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food
is fundamental in contributing a well-rounded meal.

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First of all
, it is
virtually
impossible to provide sufficient
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food
for the whole population. Each
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country
has
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different
geographic and weather condition,
hence
, no nations are capable to produce adequate supplies.
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,
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some
exotic fruit can
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be grown
in tropical region such as Vietnam, while most berries can
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be found
in temperate climate areas.
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Countries
like Laos, for
further
instance, without sea border, will depend on exported sea
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products
from other
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countries
. Thanks to the act of importing
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food
,
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people
from
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different
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countries
are able to enjoy
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kinds of produce that are non-existent in their home countries.

Secondly
, minimizing the act of importing might lead to
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some
serious diplomatic straits. By cutting down the throat of importing, one is
also
deteriorating its foreign trade link to other nations, losing potential overseas markets for exporting
as well
. Several cases of international commercial trade crisis have occurred for this possibility and caused certain economic despair in not
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just
both
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countries
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all over the globe.

In conclusion
, my firm conviction is that it is an unfeasible task for
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some
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countries
to provide
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for everyone, and
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food
importation should
be embraced
, thanks to its contribution to the abundance and the variety of our daily meals, and for the sake of the international economy.
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IELTS essay The woman expresses her opinion of the legal aid project. States her opinion in favor of the project. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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