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In many places women are taking jobs which are traditionally done by men What do you think make these changes happen What s your opinion about it v.1

In many places women are taking jobs which are traditionally done by men What do you think make these changes happen What s your opinion about it v. 1
Technology has changed every aspect of our life including the way we learn and teach. Nowadays it is possible to earn degrees online. Online forums allow you to ask questions on any topic and receive answers within a matter of minutes. However, I still believe that online education cannot replace classroom based learning and teaching. Online learning has its advantages. You can learn from the comforts of your home. The flexible learning hours are a boon for people who can’t afford to spend 6 or 7 hours in the classroom. Also, the internet has made it possible for learners to find teachers from any part of the world. So, for example, a student who wants to learn Spanish can find Spanish teachers online and learn from her home. She doesn’t have to go to Spain or find an institution that teaches Spanish in her country. Online learning has its disadvantages too. Since there is no one to supervise the assignment of learners or evaluate pupil progress that learners need a great amount of motivation and discipline to complete their course successfully. Distractions are a real problem for students doing online programs. By contrast, classroom learning does not have many of these drawbacks. The best thing about classroom learning is that it creates an ambiance conducive to learning. In a class students are surrounded by others who also want to score higher grades. This encourages you to work harder. In addition, subjects like medicine and engineering cannot be taught online because the emphasis is on practical not theory. To conclude, online learning may have its benefits, but I still feel that classroom learning is superior to online learning. That said, the internet and information technology has endless possibilities. Both students and teachers will benefit a lot if they take advantage of the power of the internet in the classroom.
Technology has
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changed
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learn
and teach. Nowadays it is possible to earn degrees
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online
.
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allow
you to ask questions on any topic and receive answers within a matter of minutes.
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, I
still
believe that
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online
education cannot replace classroom based
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learning
and teaching.

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learning
has its advantages. You can
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learn
from the comforts of your home. The flexible
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learning
hours are a boon for
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people
who can’t afford to spend 6 or 7 hours in the classroom.
Also
, the internet has made it possible for learners to find teachers from any part of the world.
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student
who wants to
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learn
Spanish can find Spanish teachers
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online
and
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learn
from her home. She doesn’t
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go to Spain or find an institution that teaches Spanish in her country.

Online
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learning
has its disadvantages too. Since there is no one to supervise the assignment of learners or evaluate pupil progress that learners need a great amount of motivation and discipline to complete their course
successfully
. Distractions are a real problem for
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students
doing
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online
programs.

By contrast, classroom
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learning
does not have
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of these drawbacks. The best thing about classroom
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learning
is that it creates an ambiance conducive to
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learning
. In a
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class
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students
are surrounded
by others who
also
want to score higher grades. This encourages you to work harder.
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, subjects like medicine and engineering cannot
be taught
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online
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because
the emphasis is on practical not theory.

To conclude
,
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online
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learning
may have its benefits,
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but
I
still
feel that classroom
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learning
is superior to
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online
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learning
. That said, the internet and information technology has endless possibilities. Both
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students
and teachers will benefit a lot if they take advantage of the power of the internet in the classroom.
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IELTS essay In many places women are taking jobs which are traditionally done by men What do you think make these changes happen What s your opinion about it v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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