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The widespread use of the Internet has thought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

The widespread use of the Internet has thought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
THERE IS A BOOST IN ENVIRONMENTAL DAMAGE IN RECENT YEARS AND THUS, GLOBAL WARMING COMES IN EFFECT AWFULLY. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL ADDRESS THE MAJOR HABIT OF HUMANS THROUGH WHICH ENVIRONMENT IS NEGATIVELY AFFECTED SECONDLY, HOW AUTHORITY CAN CONDUCT VARIOUS AWARNESS PROGRAM TO INFORM THE PUBLIC ABOUT THE FUTURE ISSUES AND LASTLY, HOW A PERSON CAN CONTRIBUTE TO REDUCE THIS DISTURBANCE. TO START WITH HUMAN ACTIVITIES, THE PRIME ACTION BY HUMAN IN DAMAGING THE SURROUNDING IS THE THROWING AWAY NUMEROUS PLASTIC BAGS WHICH IS NON-BIODEGREDABLE AND NON RECYCLEBLE TOO. HENCE, IT STAYS IN THE SOIL FOR MANY YEARS WITHOUT BEING DECOMPOSED. FOR EXAMPLE, DUMPPED DATA OF UK DEPICTED THAT 70% GARABAGES IS DUE O THE USAGE OF THE PLASTIC. THUS, I BELIEVE THAT THE TRASHES BY THE HUMAN ARE THE MOST CONCERN ACTION FOR THE GAMAGED SURROUNDINGS. ON THE SIDE OF SUGGETION FOR THE REGIME IS THAT GOVERNMENT CAN IMPLEMENT REGOROUS RULES FOR THE PUBLIC SUCH AS, THE COMMUNITYWILL BE PENALIZED FOR NOT THROWING TRASHES ACCORDING TO MUNICIPALITY RULES. THIS WILL MAKE THEM FURIOUS ABOUT PENALTY. BECAUSE NO ONE LIKES TO PAY FINE FOR THEIR SILLY MISTAKES. FOR INSTANCE, USA GOVERNMENT HAS RULE FOR EVERY HABITANTS THAT THEY HAVE TO KEEP THEIR WET AND DRY GARBAGES SEPERATELY IN DIVERT COLOUR BINS. IF THEY FIND THE WRONG PLACEMENT, THEN, THE ONWENR OF THE HOUSE GETS A MEMO. FROM THE INDIVIDUAL PERSPECTIVE, ONE CAN OBTAIN A PROPER INFORMATION THROUGH THE AUTHORITY OFFICE AND FOLLOWING THE RULES AND REGULATIO ACCORDINGLY AS A RESULT, FUTURE DAMAGE WILL BE DECLINES. THIS WILL MAKE OUR PLANT HEALTHY AND SAVE FOR FUTURE GENERATION. FOR EXAMPLE, CANADA HAS THE IDENTITY OF BEING GREEN COUNTRY BECAUSE OF THE CIVILIANS KNOWLEDGE AND CONCERN ABOUT THE PLANET. IN CONCLUSION, IT IS UNTOLD TRUTH THAT WORLD IS FACING THE GLOBAL WARMING EFFECT IN THE PRESENT TIME. HOWEVER, EVERY INDIVIDUAL ON THE EARTH IS RESPONSIBLE TO RESERVE THE PLANET WHETHER IT IS GVERMENT OR PERSON. THEREFORE, I THINK WE ALL HAVE TO TAKE SOME ACTION TO REDUCE THE NEGTIVE EFFECT OF THE EARTH.
THERE IS A BOOST IN ENVIRONMENTAL DAMAGE IN RECENT YEARS AND
THUS
, GLOBAL WARMING
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COMES
IN EFFECT AWFULLY.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL ADDRESS THE MAJOR HABIT OF
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HUMANS
THROUGH WHICH ENVIRONMENT IS
NEGATIVELY
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AFFECTED
SECONDLY
, HOW AUTHORITY CAN CONDUCT VARIOUS
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AWARNESS
PROGRAM TO INFORM THE PUBLIC ABOUT THE FUTURE ISSUES AND
LASTLY
, HOW A PERSON CAN CONTRIBUTE TO
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REDUCE
THIS DISTURBANCE.

TO
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START
WITH
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HUMAN
ACTIVITIES, THE PRIME ACTION BY
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HUMAN
IN DAMAGING THE SURROUNDING IS THE THROWING AWAY NUMEROUS PLASTIC BAGS WHICH IS
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NON-BIODEGREDABLE
AND NON
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RECYCLEBLE
TOO.
HENCE
, IT STAYS IN THE SOIL FOR
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MANY
YEARS WITHOUT
BEING DECOMPOSED
.
FOR EXAMPLE
,
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DUMPPED
DATA OF UK DEPICTED THAT 70%
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GARABAGES
IS DUE O THE USAGE OF THE PLASTIC.
THUS
, I BELIEVE THAT THE TRASHES BY THE
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HUMAN
ARE THE MOST CONCERN ACTION FOR THE
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GAMAGED
SURROUNDINGS.

ON THE SIDE OF
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SUGGETION
FOR THE REGIME IS THAT
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GOVERNMENT
CAN IMPLEMENT
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REGOROUS
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RULES
FOR THE PUBLIC SUCH AS, THE
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COMMUNITYWILL
BE PENALIZED
FOR NOT THROWING TRASHES ACCORDING TO MUNICIPALITY
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RULES
. THIS WILL
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MAKE
THEM FURIOUS ABOUT PENALTY.
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BECAUSE
NO ONE LIKES TO PAY FINE FOR THEIR SILLY MISTAKES.
FOR INSTANCE
, USA
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GOVERNMENT
HAS
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RULE
FOR EVERY
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HABITANTS
THAT THEY
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HAVE TO
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KEEP
THEIR WET AND DRY
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GARBAGES
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SEPERATELY
IN DIVERT
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COLOUR
BINS. IF THEY FIND THE
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WRONG
PLACEMENT, THEN, THE
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ONWENR
OF THE
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HOUSE
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GETS
A MEMO.

FROM THE INDIVIDUAL PERSPECTIVE, ONE CAN OBTAIN
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A PROPER INFORMATION
THROUGH THE AUTHORITY OFFICE AND FOLLOWING THE
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RULES
AND
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REGULATIO
ACCORDINGLY
AS A RESULT
, FUTURE DAMAGE WILL BE DECLINES. THIS WILL
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MAKE
OUR PLANT HEALTHY AND SAVE FOR FUTURE GENERATION.
FOR EXAMPLE
, CANADA HAS THE IDENTITY OF BEING GREEN COUNTRY
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BECAUSE
OF THE CIVILIANS KNOWLEDGE AND CONCERN ABOUT THE PLANET.

IN CONCLUSION
, IT IS UNTOLD TRUTH THAT WORLD IS FACING THE GLOBAL WARMING EFFECT IN THE PRESENT TIME.
HOWEVER
, EVERY INDIVIDUAL ON THE EARTH IS RESPONSIBLE TO RESERVE THE PLANET WHETHER IT IS
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GVERMENT
OR PERSON.
THEREFORE
, I
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THINK
WE ALL
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HAVE TO
TAKE
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SOME
ACTION TO
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REDUCE
THE
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NEGTIVE
EFFECT OF THE EARTH.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The widespread use of the Internet has thought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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